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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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SILENCE silence is a thunder that vibrates the inner ear and echoes in the mellowed chambers of the mind it comes out of the unknown storm cloud from strange winds and squelches the creative phrase in the suicide of spoken thought it is a meadowlark wrapped in a shroud of "no" a harp buried in the unopened hymnal of the spirit a vacuum of living that sends a lance’s pain through the still of void and sears the nerve ends with empty burning it holds the ear prisoner to nothingness in a torment of the heart on the fiercest edge of torture it pains the soul and the victim ponders in silence the kindred origins of the unheard it is the child of fear the brother of timidity the mother of loneliness the footprint of uncertainty the invisible veil of stifled air and unchurned waters born of human nature Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-27-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow! Liz, what a free verse--and an emotional piece...amazing phrases! "it is the harp buried in the unopened hymnal of the spirit"...just wonderful! The loudest silence, I think, is the one that waits...Hugs! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Liz...free verse becomes you as does any other style you write  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Lizzie Santos took some wax, Mopped her floors to fill in cracks, When the job was nicely done, She did her legs which wasn't fun. Her legs and floors were slick as grease, You could slide your hand up past her knees, Her floors so slick you'd bust your ass, She's one wax spreading little lass! Hi ya Lizzie!!! How in the health are ya?...Hope things are going well for ya....I miss ya all.......Nicely done...as usual...you really should write a book yanno. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful poem, Elizabeth!!! And as soon as I finish ROFLMAO at Toerag's contribution, I'll echo his suggestion that you write that book! *S* |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Wow ... how you've expressed your feelings here Liz .... Exquisite ... Toe .... Liz brought me a book of her poetry of the last year .... and it's amazing !!!! It should be published ... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lizzie, my friend~ I always like everything you do. This is excellent free verse. How are you, Liz? I care, as do others here. Prayers are with you my dear. *Boy, that Toe can put a smile on your face. LOL ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
*TOE SMACKING GOOD*.... It really is good, Elizabeth... I just can't ever resist the urge to trip'im, ya know? I particularly like the "silence is a thunder" oxymoron you opened with.... Nice job, my friend.....  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellently written, Elizabeth! That silence can sure be horrible, can't it? You've expressed it very well! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, As always your poetry is excellent. You should try to publish. Love Sy |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
At times, I know of the silence you have captured in your magnificently written poem~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I'm speechless!!!......well done. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nice poem!!!!!!I like this poem very much. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your gift amazes me at times, Liz. This is a beautiful piece of writing. Human nature, indeed...silence can be our fiercest foe. ~ Claire |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful piece, and so true. It's good to see you writing free-form! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Elizabeth, may you never suffer for the malady of silence. The world would be a much sadder place. This is beautiful.. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I wish so that I could as freely as you... and as flowing... yet I stumble over emotions that want to burst forth uncontrolably with a rhythm all their own... truly "it is a meadowlark wrapped in a shroud" of "no." How do yo let it go..? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, I don't feel this verse is good - much too loose and can be greatly improved. Wish I could spend some time with you so you could give me some pointers. But thank you for your comments about the phrases. Much appreciated hoot, Free verse still is not comfortable. Thanks Toe, Where have you been? What do you mean, waxy legs. I can't think of anyone else who would come up with that. I could write a book about you. That's the most colorful subject I can think to write about. Glad to see you. suthern, Toe pops up at the most unexpected moments with the most unpredictable remarks. just write down some of his savory quotes and we'll write a book together. Thanks Pepper, How is the sweet one today? Thanks for your comments. Love ya Marge, Thanks. Everything is going great. I will post soon in announcements. Toe is a card. He brightens my day Nan. Thanks. I think this can be much improved. Iappreciate your comments Denise. Silence speaks the loudest. Thanks Sy, A very nice compliment from the master. Thank you Love ya Mariee, Most can relate. Thanks for your kind remark. Danny, Is this a play on words? Thanks! vanana, Thanks you, dear, for commenting Claire. Wish some of you accomplished poets would give me a class on free verse. I greatly appreciate your remarks Lovebug, See that?, I ventured into free verse (very nervously). I'm still shaking in my shoes, silently, of course). Thanks, sweetie Balladeer, I will put down my pen when you do. Thanks lucky, It's funny you should say this, because I was just thinking the same about yours. What a beautiful verse to Rainbow. Magnificent! I wish I could write like that. Ired it several times. Thanks for reading and commenting Liz |
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