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The scramble of awake
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The scramble of awake |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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This is just a poem nothing more. The scramble of awake From the greyness of the inbetween, These four words crept. They were partly shock and partly seem, What did I expect? And from the dream state quite real, These four words leapt. Brought me from ambiance to fret, What did I expect? I challenged the notion of what? These four word swept. While I stewed in muse and awes think. What did I expect? In the darkness behind my eyes, These four words wept. Till awake closed the inbetween, of What did I expect? And I rose confused, somewhat inept, From this dream where the answer still slept. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
From the greyness of the inbetween, These four words crept. They were partly shock and partly seem, What did I expect? ---------------- In the darkness behind my eyes, These four words wept. Till awake closed the inbetween, of What did I expect? And I rose confused, somewhat inept, From this dream where the answer still slept. ---------------- just a poem?? A WAY COOL poem SY, really, I love this poems cryptic and dark feel...very well written out thoughts.., enjoyed this one much. take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like you couplet... as usual.. We really do seem to find answers easily in our dream-state, don't we??.. Another nice one, Sy....  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Love the title, Seymour. Oh, and the poem's good too. I like mine over~medium.  ~ Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I woke up from the waking dream Of blackness of the sunlit screen And pondered in the hours not slept But what did I expect? Awake but sleeping in a dream Of loveliness of in between My mind to those past visions swept But what did I expect And now released from daylight ponder Not the real of what I wondered My mind on dreamless cloud has slept But what did I expect In truth of what I should have known I sit here on a solid stone And ponder now in introspect Of what I should expect The greyness of the dreams of wake Wrought of a singular mistake Has withered in the vines of cease And now I sleep in peace A classic Tabin beauty Love ya Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Thank you for the WAY COOL, love your answers. *L* Nan, You are a love, thanks for the read and comment. *L* Meadow, Thank you claire always enjoy your answers. *L* Elizabeth, Your poetic answer is better then mine. You are such a talent. Love ya Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh that misty period between sleep and wakefullness...expressed so eloquently |
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