Open Poetry #6 |
~Winds Of Change~ |
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Winds Of Change~ Poetic winds blow ... now sweetly swept away, carry me to the place in you ... so that I might stay. Safe passage to your harbors ... sail across your seas, breath in all your pleasures ... set my spirit free. Poetic winds blow ... gentle breezes take my will, carry me to the place in you ... where time stands still. Take me so far away ... to discover your beaches of sand, under your starry skies ... I rise up ... heart in my hand. Poetic winds blow ... quietly taken into the night, carry me to the place in you ... warmed by desires light. Bathe me in your mystical waters ... sun dry me on your shore, caress me with your winds of change ... allow my heart to soar. Poetic winds blow ... lift me up, now Heaven bound, carry me to the place in you ... where contentment is found. Fly with me in twilight skies ... painted in hues by the setting sun, as we fly free towards the rising moon ... two souls become one. Janet Marie Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Janet, Like the break-up style. It reminds me of some things I did years ago. Nice for a change. I'll have to check my archives. Thanks for your "re" on beseeched. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Janet Marie, I must say I just love the way you broke the lines....wonderful!!! It is as if the winds are blowing your words on the screen. I can feel the poetic winds blowing right now. This is beautiful!! Gives me hope of finding the same. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Janet. . . This is wonderful. . . I read this poem three times. . . once across, once just reading the words on the left and the third time just reading the words on the right. . . I don't know if you meant this poem to be that way. . . but I saw it right away. . . and think that it's wonderful. . . Your inspiration definitely shows in this one. . . lucky person he!!! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Exceptional, Janet Marie, so peaceful and endearing...I LIKE this mood in you!love to you. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I could't help but read this several times Beautiful Rex}>{{{{o> |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have felt the same as if writing poetry would "set my spirit free" and "allow my heart to soar." Writing helps me to feel my feelings and declare the things my heart wants to share. James |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
~Breathtakingly Beautiful~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
J.M. Such style and class, Fly with me in twilight skies ... painted in hues by the setting sun, as we fly free towards the rising moon ... two souls become one. and most of beauty. Such beautiful poetry my friend. **AWHs** Whatever strength I add to myself becomes my greatest weakness, while whatever weakness I'll consciously endure will be replaced with a strength that is not my own. G. Finley |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Janet Marie~ This is exceptional quality work. I am captivated with the poems-within-the-poem. Left to right Left side - Right side Every two lines 1-2, 1-2, 1-2, 1-2 and then 3-4,3-4,3-4,3-4 even did it from the bottom up using the reverse two line scheme. Whoa ! Refreshingly different ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
Wow. Yet again I am blown over by your fantastic work, so much so, I can't think of anything else to say. Thanks for being so brilliant! The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I would have to say this is my favorite of the work I have seen of yours. Nicely written, you should be proud |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Janet, Wow! I must say, you have taken my breath away, then given it back in a completely different way. Instead of breathing just "air" I can feel the "poetic winds" around me now! Exceptional job! Terry Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This is a work of art ... Janet .... exceptional and oh, so beautiful ... Love this piece A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
JM, great work as always. I would certainly have to agree with all the above comments. Marina |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My most sincere thank you to ALL for your encouragement of this poem...I grow and learn from you. I am deeply touched by the emotions this one evoked. I most of all appreciate you taking the time to read it. serenity...right back at you sweets Sven and Margie...you guys make me smile... I wish I could tell you I was such a poet that I set out to do that "3 way pattern"...but it just came as a gift of the moment of inspiration...thank you for giving me so much poetic credit...I hope to earn it in time (smile) THANK YOU ALL WHO READ AND REPLIED. to my partner in rhyme...thank you for sweet inspiration...I am most grateful... and content (smile) take care, janet marie Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Simply Beautiful. Love the way this is set up. Agree with Sven, reads so well anyway you look at it. Even turned it upside down and was just as good (smiling) JM, this is super!!!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, I am impressed and this is one of your best. *L* Sy |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I love this style you do when you do it, if that makes sense. I have saved this one, and don't mind me - just dusting shelves down here and saving a few keepers. Carpe' Diem |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I see three beautiful poems in this one JM, I am sorry I missed it then. Beautiful work as usual Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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