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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
My Eyes When burdened with the unforgiving fear, That love you've shared may well be love in vain. Ask not for flowered words to soothe your ear, But search my eyes for proof your love remains. My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie, They offer you a glimpse into my heart. Now with your kisses dry the tears I cry, And watch the fears of loving lone depart. Though feeble words fall short of their intent, And deeds may never satisfy your need, Just gaze into my eyes for your content, And leave your doubts to wither and recede. What then the flaws of deeds and words conceal, My eyes the depth of perfect love reveal. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Good..they are the windows to our soul....  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Another great one, David... You might consider submitting some of your work to the main site for permanent posting.. Check it out if you haven't - It's an awesome place..  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Awesome sonnet David ! I love it. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Argh, Munda stole the words right out of my mouth!  uhm, Excellent Sonnet I love it |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent poem....the eyes speak volumes about us all. This was very good!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When burdened with the unforgiving fear, That love you've shared may well be love in vain. Ask not for flowered words to soothe your ear, But search my eyes for proof your love remains. My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie, They offer you a glimpse into my heart. Now with your kisses dry the tears I cry, And watch the fears of loving lone depart. -------------------- *SIGH* David...this poem is EQUISITE...TRULY!!! I love it...such depth and sweet devotion... wow...you expressed this one with such grace... I am really taken with this poem... very very nice, take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, David! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
just stopped by for another read...Im printing this one out...for future reads(smile) back to the top... this one goes  take care jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is wonderful poetry, David! |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
"My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie" nor could they, lost there, love deny and still no matter how i try they give my heart away... beautiful work David... Destiny [This message has been edited by Destiny (edited 03-27-2000).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful sonnet... keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well done, enjoyed. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your gift for writing is lovely...as is this piece. ~ Claire |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You are indeed a true craftman of your art, David. Another excellent piece. |
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Flidais New Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 9Durham, CA |
Impressing. I wish I had that kind of talent |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When burdened with the unforgiving fear, That love you've shared may well be love in vain. Ask not for flowered words to soothe your ear, But search my eyes for proof your love remains. My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie, They offer you a glimpse into my heart. Now with your kisses dry the tears I cry, And watch the fears of loving lone depart. Though feeble words fall short of their intent, And deeds may never satisfy your need, Just gaze into my eyes for your content, And leave your doubts to wither and recede. =========================== this will always be a fave of mine... and it MUST be read aloud to be done justice...its cadence is as smooth as butter...its such a lovely write... When burdened with the unforgiving fear, That love you've shared may well be love in vain. I have always loved its opening two lines..they are poetically stunning.... and then the intend of these two.... But search my eyes for proof your love remains. My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie, yep...this one is a *sigh* just waiting to happen. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David~ My ... my ... my~ Each one I read just gets lovelier and lovelier~ You are indeed a craftsman of the art~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you do these quite well |
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