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Of a wild love |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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Come to me you of the alone the prey caught sweating in the shadow of nights unlightened there is a sweet chime of trees and the brush of wings in the cradled peace of forests they drift out your name and mine the rifts and rents of impossibilities washed away like the chase of servals and leopards after the hunts I am the wild you wake to yet lose in the lost dream and how I know the taste of your water-streams the sight of your fresh-run trails I know them as the whole of a harvested world Come to me and yield the grains to bounty you and I delivered as the lamb and lion caught in the blink of a sparrow’s eye the touch of the wind of a moth’s flight |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
OUTSTANDING free verse! Rave on! Rave on! INclan |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Wow Severn, This is truly lovely! I've read a few of your pieces lately and there is a trend here.......excellence! Teach me.......lol Well done. Moonshine. *-*-*-*-*-*-*- |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow. I'm at a loss for words. I love the form, the imagery...the whole thing! Very good!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Exquisite !  'you and I delivered as the lamb and lion caught in the blink of a sparrow’s eye the touch of the wind of a moth’s flight Simply exquisite ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Free verse is not something I usually enjoy but the way your words complimented one another was beautiful. Nice ride! David2 |
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Panthers Chrysalis Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 51 |
Lost on the breeze of your talents! Simply Marvelous!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Severn, this is EXCELLENT...the words float and the presentation and imagery were perfect, very nice!!!!!!!!! take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sweet butterfly, you've done it again!!! This is Excellent my dear, the imagery is fantastic and well its beautiful as your poetry always is. Well Done!! *hugs*What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I do love your poetic ambience.... Very nice, Severn..  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"I am the wild you wake to" Wow, what a line. Awesome poem, Severn. Such beautiful flow of emotion. I lack aprropriate compliment for you. Michael |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh my gosh, and wow! I have no words really for the wonder of you poetic talent Kamla...you are ....you just are! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
That is one awesome poem, my friend! Corinne |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
K - Your poetry is a breath of fresh air. Wonderful to see you posting, & please keep it up. N |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A MASTERPIECE liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I sit here at a loss for words....wonderful!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Don't you think a Poem of this caliber should be sent back for another look? YES! Liz |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
I too agree that this is excellent! I love the feeling it leaves me with! Beautiful, wonderful, stimulating and excelent job!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Magnificent. Like Michael, I was especially moved by ~ "I am the wild you wake to" Such lovely, lovely writing. Thank you! ~ Claire |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
What can I add that has not been said? very nice poetry. A masterful work. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
INclan - such a mighty compliment deserves a mighty thankyou!!! Moonshine - Soon you and Maree and I can sit around and talk poetry - won't that just be cool?! Thanks hon! PdV - thankye thankye thankye!!! Marge(y) - I am glad you liked this, ray of sunshine.  David - I can truly relate - I feel that way about rhyming verse!!! I can't quite click with it...but every now and then one comes along that just reaches me deeply. I'm honoured to have written a freeverse poem that you responded to. Thanks. P C - glad you breezed through! Thanks. jm - thanks sweetie - very much...such lovely words you gave me. Ss - let's see....it's 2.5 weeks now! I can't wait... here I come Sydney...thanks always for your support... Nan - poetic ambience? Wow - cool!!! Thanks Nan! Michael...That is a lovely lovely thing to say and I deeply appreciate it. Martie - then may I suggest we stick to the one oxygen tent then?? LOL - I have an idea - let's do a collaboration one day. Corinne - thanks hon - hey, I keep meaning to write - I promise I will... Nic - My fellow piscean...(and aren't we just the best...*g*) thankyou. Lizzy - thankyou dear for that mammoth compliment. Your faithful support is a treasure to me. Ruthy - thankyou my friend. Hugs Lizzy again -  Shelley - that is such a range of effects and wow! Thanks!!! Claire - ThankYOU for reading and liking! Danny - hehe. It can get like that! Thankyou so much...  K |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
See ... this is what happens when you don't keep those claws in as I told you to ....... Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr this is too too wild Lady K Later, my favourite feline SP |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hehe...grrrrrrrr back from a certain furry marsupial...NOT! Thanks sweet Sir P Lady K |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Severn, this just flowed right over me, do it again. Parker |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Wonderful..lovely..your very talented. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Yup Severn - it shall be very kewl! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
I'm sorry I did no comment on this before, your poem is exquisite. Thank you for posting it. *L* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sweet Butterfly, yessss 2 1/2 weeks to go YAY!!! and You'll touch down in Sydney wooohooooooo What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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