Open Poetry #6 |
Same Time, Next Life - ( For a friend of a friend) |
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Same Time, Next Life The days are short, the hours are few I’ve not much time for loving you We met upon the sunset hour And witnessed love begin to flower The body has grown ill and weak The mind too fragile dreams to seek But hearts are beating ecstacy In rhythms of the pounding sea Love has come to us too late A lover’s loss, a wicked fate But time will bury all the strife I’ll meet you here same time, next life Just stand upon the ocean pier The lovliest evening of the year Against the red of sunset sky A soul that loved but did not die Your face will not appear the same And I won’t even know your name But this I swear to be the true Within my heart I’ll know it’s you We’ll be as one, as man and wife Just meet me here same time, next life Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-25-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW!! This is breathtaking, Elizabeth!! So beautiful!! Denise |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I like this a lot!!!!!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, I know that you know how this poem breaks my heart...your heart sings dear poet friend! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lizzie~ This is one of the most beautiful things I've seen you do. What a wonderful gesture for a friend. Your heart overflows with loving thoughts. I can't begin to let you know how this touched me. Perhaps there is a 'pier' in all our lives, where we stand waiting for that recognition to dawn. Love you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise, Thank you for the WOW. vandana, Thanks for all the exclamation marks. Glad you liked it Martie, I wrote this for the friend of a very dear friend, but I'm glad it also touched you. Marge, You put more exuberance and love into your responses than most put into their poetry. You are a dear, and I'm glad you liked this Thank you Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Just exquisite writing. Love ya Sy |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Elizabeth, This was very good, especially the last two lines. I love repeating lines when they are integral to the theme of a piece of work. We’ll be as one, as man and wife Just meet me here same time, next life Good work! David2 |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Elizabeth, This was very good, especially the last two lines. I love repeating lines when they are integral to the theme of a piece of work. We’ll be as one, as man and wife Just meet me here same time, next life Good work! David2 |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, You are kind. Thank you. Liz David, Thanks for your comments Liz |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
We'll be as one, as man and wife Just meet me here same time, next life An exquisite poem Liz tracie |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I have to agree with the rest on your final couplet, Elizabeth - It's just wonderful.. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah! I would love us all to meet here same time, next life....a wonderful poem for your friend. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Elizabeth: Your lovely poem brought a deluge of tears... maybe there's hope for me in another life. *S* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Tracie, Thanks for reading and commenting Nan, Thank you PDV, We'll meet here on the forum suthern, You've got a lot more living to do in this one first, dear. Thanks Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
The poem is wonderful Liz ... and I too, love those last two lines ... Took my breath away .... Sad and exceptional ..... Wow ..... L, Shannon |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"A soul that loved but did not die" This line touched me so acutely, Liz. The poem is beautiful. Would that we could each hold this sentiment in our heart. Thank you for sharing this here. ~ Claire |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh, I love this poem, Liz, and not JUST because it's a love poem! You are extremely talented, and I'll be looking forward to your next piece! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Pepper, Thank you for reading. And thank you for responding. And thank you for liking it Love ya Liz Claire, What a lovely compliment Thanks Lovebug, I'm not writing right now. Have got lots on my mind. Thanks for your sweet comments You're a dear. I'll be in touch Liz |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
How perfectly perfect, Elizabeth...You have expressed the regretful heartbreak of many with this...Another stunner from the Lady Santos. Thank you. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Beautiful thoughts here ... not really a late start ... but an early begining beautiful Rex}>{{{{o> |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Well, what else can I say, after all these great comments? LOL Loved it, loved it, loved it! Bobbycat =^..^= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Serenity, How sweet your comments, Thank you Rex, Yes, I loved your remark. It is true, it's just the beginning. Thanks Bobbycat. Exuberant response. Thanks so much Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I think so many can relate to this one Liz...nicely done as always |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Absolutely wonderful! And thank you for reading mine earlier! Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
couldn't keep the chills from overtaking me... this poem touched me deeply. it's an amazing thing when souls connect so profoundly that it can't be contained in one lifetime, and you have expressed that so beautifully, that even though it was written for your friend, i feel the need to thank you. Destiny |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Hoot, This happens more than we realize. Thanks Terry, It is I who thank you for reading and commenting on mine. You're very kind Destiny, It's probably the notion of this poem that so many are relating to. The idea that love continues on no matter what, the idea of a spiritual recognition between two people, whether you believe in reincarnation or life after death in heaven. There is a permanence to some relationships, which some couples are aware of. Some people meet late in life and have a short time together but have the promise of a continuation of that love into the future. If you were touched by this poem, then you can call it yours. Thanks for your comments. Liz |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Elizabeth~I am both deeply saddened and touched by this poem. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Billy Bolden Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 23 |
How touching and sad... I will look for your other works. BB |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Elizabeth, Thanks, dear, for commenting on this poem Billy, A Kind remark. Thank you Liz |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Elizabeth, truly you have told us all of the power of love to stretch beyond the boundaries of space and time. . . told us of a love so deep and so true that it could not be contained by something so simple as death. I have to agree with Destiny when she said, "it's an amazing thing when souls connect so profoundly that it can't be contained in one lifetime," I think that this is the kind of love that we all wish to have in this life, and in the next. . . Perhaps I have said too much, but as someone who believes in the power of love, I cannot say enough about this work. . .thank you my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, my friend, I am smiling at the response to this poem that you wrote for a friend of a dear friend. Thank you for writing it!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sven Thank you for your wonderful comments. It is truly rare and wonderful if two people experience this kind of love, no matter the age or circumstances. I will be sure to tell my friend of your remarks. They were much appreciated. Thank you Liz Martie, thanks for your comments. This shows how many people contemplate a subject that is never spoken of. And I agree with Sven, that love is a rare gift. Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ing Because beauty should always rise to the top~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Another example of why you are the master, Liz |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
one of the most softly beautiful poems I have read. martyjo |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
and this be true.. on reading your last verse ,no breath I drew. |
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