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| Open Poetry #6 |
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Between Dreams |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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I looked up at Jupiter Damn spot out there looking down on me like some giant red cycloptic eye hasn't changed one bit since dreaming of Star Trekking and Captain Kirk swashing Un-buckled to Venusian Goddesses Y2K flying cars and moon colonies Orwell's year come and gone with little fanfare as the walls came tumbling down around Gorbechev's damn spot Never had a hummer in my office talking to foreign heads telephoned spotting up navy blue dresses Some kinda mid-life crisis people call it when you're spotting the big four Oh…act like I've lost my mind or something but if you ask me I was crazy all those years before and it's Sanity that makes people really uncomfortable cause they don't want to hear that they're chasing their own tails and might as well be trying to varnish Jupiter by Jupiter Excuse me if I'm between dreams right now but I don't think I'm going back to sleep I think I've spotted something better Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
I will have to reread this one to get the full effect but I had to comment on it now. I enjoyed every moment reading it. Isn't that the true test of poetry, enjoyment? David2 |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Where is that Jupiter anyway...I think tonight I need to know...I like listening to what is in your head...which is how it seems reading your poetry. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Interesting read, LR. Between dreams, I like that. You've given me something to ponder. Thank you! Denise |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thank you all! and you're welcome d...  |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
ROFL....You're a case, must be that star, huh? HUSG |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Alright LR...no more Star Trek before bedtime mr... *picking you up by the shirt tail and dragging your butt to bed* Don't stay up too late tonight sir!!!  Cute poem!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thank you RG... And devina -- hmmm... I thought you of all people appreciated a man who was up all night?? lol |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
This is what happens in between dreams? My, star trek sure has a profound effect on the psyche. Love the poem. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Between dreams... yeah, that's it... I'm just between dreams... Thanks, LR..  |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
... or is that Justin Between Dreams..? |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
You never had a humma? What a bumma! Oh, I mean, you never had one in your office while on the phone with somebody important... well, that could change your whole outlook on life, y'know? Talk about going to Jupiter and back! Seriously, though, loved this poem LR- am glad I visited your website the other day to discover your talent. In between dreams... I know all about that! And you've phrased it so vividly here... Well done! doreen |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiling here...loved the end |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
hey !!!loved this one !!! Had me grinning from start to finish....and at least it was never boring!! Tess  "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Oh my... what responses.... Doreen... I was just trying to say I never made it to president either.. LOL... but... if there are any volunteers who want to help out with the hummer part!!! LOL... Thanks everyone.. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
I get it... hehe... duh!  These lines were terrific, btw: "and it's Sanity that makes people really uncomfortable cause they don't want to hear that they're chasing their own tails"  doreen [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 03-25-2000).] |
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