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My Fear(I lack a better title. Ideas welcome)
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My Fear(I lack a better title. Ideas welcome) |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Island of my solitude Looking at you, looking at me Observing our inescapable desire Vowed to never let you go Every night I dream of you On that fateful evening No one had told me Loving you could hurt so much Yeilding to my fears, I left Yearning for you Of the love I lost Until the end of my days Ok. This is my first shot at this type of thing. I felt like experimenting tonight. If dying is the process of living life to its end. Then what is living? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Free verse is hard to grasp at times...you did very well by it  |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Our emotions don't always make the right decisions ... especially when our emotions are mixed Rex}<{{{{o> |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Hoot- Thanx for the support. Free verse isn't that hard for me but to write something based on the first letters of each line is something I haven't attempted before. Rex- Wise words. Thank you for the information. PS. The first letters of each line are a line in themselves. If dying is the process of living life to its end. Then what is living? |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Scorched Dragon, I think this turned out very well! I've never written an acrostic piece either...perhaps I'll try my hand as well. Enjoyed this. Claire |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
well I never noticed the hidden line way cool! as my daughter says Hey ... maybe thats your title ? Rex}<{{{{o> I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Meadowmuse- Thank you. I would I to see this "try" when you actually do it.If dying is the process of living life to its end. Then what is living? |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
for a first attempt,this is fantastic well done. |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
This is very clever writing. What do you mean you lack a title? I think it's obvious, don't you? -- "I Love Only You" Also, try bolding the first letter of each line. ~Gene [This message has been edited by u_gene (edited 02-11-2000).] |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Rex- You got in there judt before I posted a reply. Title sounds good. fool- Thank you for the praise. Gene- Clever? Me? Who would of thought. Yes I think that will be the title to this poem. And I am not sue how to put anything in "Bold" on here. If anyone knows, please let me know. If dying is the process of living life to its end. Then what is living? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
As you may know by now, I do not care to meddle in the affairs of dragons, but may i respectfully suggest that your title is your first line? I defer to your most excellent judgement, of course. |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Serenity- Thanks for the suggestion. And by the way, some dragons do know how to take a suggestion. If dying is the process of living life to its end. Then what is living? |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Nice!! " I Love Only You!! Creative!! Yep, your writing does have a common thread!!< !signature--> "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side [This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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