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Elliptical Light Evermore
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Elliptical Light Evermore |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Elliptical Light Evermore I am walking in a shadow that distills tactility, nor does it listen to this race of time that quickens each step ‘til breathing is my focus. I am tired of the constancy that keeps me from withering, when I would sink and soak my hands in the earth until I could feel my own pulse there in the mire fired and magical as this orb of moon that carries meaning in its circumference. Feelings are so fragile as this waning candle, they step with precision touching each stone to be sure of motivation, gauging each word for purity. I want to fly past the edge of meaning and be effortless translucent flow mingled and pressed by stars torn by storms density until I find passion’s gate open and calling to me and there to glide that elliptical light evermore. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-22-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Although I love rhyme, yours is the only free verse poetry I read with delight and joy. You fly like a bird. *L* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sy, that's because she has just the right touch of rhythm, and her imagery is always wonderful... shhhh... don't tell her I gave away her secrets, OK??? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You know - that I know - that Seymour knows fine poetry .... so, you know - that I know -that you know, without me telling you I know, that I have been known to like the things you know well enough to let us know about them. And from this deduction I have drawn the conclusion that you knew all along that I WOULD LOVE THIS !  And I do .... ya' know !  THAT MOON ROCKS ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Simply beautiful writing, Martie! But of course! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
What did she say??? Anyway, Martie, again an outstanding verse, and I also know good poetry when I see it.You know that I one of your greatest fans. Love ya, Liz |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Martie, this is absolutely stunning..you have touched my soul with your words and I relate deeply. Your work is so beautiful, just as it always is. *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--Your kind words make me fly! Nan--You're so cute and such a sweetheart Marge--Yes, I knew all along that you would like it, and LOL, ya know? Denise--But of course you always reply with such sweet words. Liz--Thanks for being a fan...ahhh..not sure what I said..Love ya Krista--I'm so glad that you relate this way to this poem...to touch anothers soul is wonderful!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Elusively fine |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Martie, Although I am not a great fan of free verse, I am a fan of fine poetry. Thank you for the ride. David2 |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
I DO LOVE free verse and I think this is an excellent example of it I love the words..even if l dont understand some of it the feeling is still there Tess "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth--Thank you friend, for reading. David--What a fine compliment from such a talented rhymer. Tess--I'm glad, because it is the feeling that matters... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Once again you have created a beautiful work of art my friend. It simply boggles my poor mind how you maintain such of flow of exquisite poems. I finished the poem and realized I had a smile of contentment on my face. Wonderful poem Martie. (p.s. and yes, you were right about the moon.. smile) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I want to fly past the edge of meaning and be effortless translucent flow mingled and pressed by stars torn by storms density until I find passion’s gate open and calling to me Wonderful stuff Martie -- from a 'free' man to a 'free' woman... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I enjoyed this verse very much. Well done. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
I too usually fail to grasp the what is intended with free verse ,but you sure paint one vivid picture here Doc |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--I can't imagine your mind being boggled, but sure glad I made a smile! Local Rebel--Thanks for being free with me. Danny--Thank you, I'm so glad you read my poem. I'll paint for you any time Doc...Thanks. |
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