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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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crowned in chains of heather ~shackling~ stone to earth nature’s birth stone to earth donned In wings of leather ~flying~ wind to sky airy high wind to sky dipped in draughts of ichor ~swimming~ water’s well ocean’s shell water’s well scorched in Furies' flicker ~burning~ fire’s flames naught remains fire’s flames "I don't claim to be a wise man, a poet or a saint. Just another man who's searching for a better way." Jon Bon Jovi |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I love the rhyme scheme you used here...I wish I could write like that. My poetry always sounds like some kind of darn nursery rhyme! LOL ACK Tis why I've put down the pen, and became merely a reader! hehe You have alot of energy and emotion in your words, this rocks! You're a "creative" writer, that's it! |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Was wondering where you've been hiding. Now I see you were in shackles all weekend, huh? Probably not a bad place to be...LOL I feel the "burning" right now that you speak of, bud. Naught remains, indeed. michael |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Mike and Gen - thanks my friends... I know this is a bit different... it's part of what is going to be a lengthy purging. Thanks for putting up with me! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Chris your versatality amazes me. This is great, I love how you've put this together  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
My oh my...you never cease to amaze me |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
LOL at your "lengthy purging"...Tis good, I am purging right beside you man! hehe I have alot of "dusting off" to do myself - whew, what a ride!  You purge well in your writing, I can't do that, and make it look so good. LOL |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Well worth the wait...ya tease...lol sorry just had to say it I have always thought of purging as getting rid of something you didn't want....If this is your "throw away" pile....wow!!! Amazing as always and as refreshing as an evening breeze. Whatever strength I add to myself becomes my greatest weakness, while whatever weakness I'll consciously endure will be replaced with a strength that is not my own. G. Finley |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher~ Your surge of purge has a wonderful 'element'to it. The clarity is evident. I like it very much. The format is awesome, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Superb, Christopher! Corinne |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Hey, there you are! Yanno, purging is a good thing...and what you make out of it, is amazing. May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
How can anyone with such a sweet innocent smile need to purge darkness from your soul? Is that what you're doing? Anyway..no matter what you're doing..now matter why you're doing it...whatever you're doing...keep doing it! I love the way you write...  |
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Rose Petal Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 52WVa. USA |
You sure are cute I must say....intelligent too! wow...what a guy! Rose |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
... and thus begins the cleansing ... I already told you that I liked this, though I believe it is a bit different now than when I first read it ... at any rate, I thought the repetition of lines was very effective, and the rhyme scheme was clever as well. Only thing that needled at me was the "draughts of ichor," but I'm sure you have some explanation for that which I am no doubt missing. That said, this was not too shabby. --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hmmm, a little of the I Ching, here? Geomancy? ('fess up, Christopher!) |
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