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Somebody Loved them Tisha
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Somebody Loved them Tisha |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Somebody loved them Tisha A casting call To queens would be Of splendor painted pageants Gowned and crowned Libations budding In southern bells carillons Star eyed girls Ringing whet anticipation Pick me, Pick me Each flower bloomed and Bloomered in chiffon tender sprouts displayed for all to ravish Somebody loved them Tisha You took them The ones who stumbled slightly In their pink innocence You took them Told them they were slightly flawed But with your help They could be the sovereigns Of a bigger prize With just a tad Of your precious Magic coaching And your extra edge Of confidence You took them Then you showed them Bigger sky's with stars Brighter than the countryside And men with power And glory could be So Generously grateful For small favors Little favors Savored between youthful Thighs and It was just one time One night Who would know? Somebody loved them Tisha Bleu Like your husband Who showed them the second Came Easier than the first time And a little more Confidence made it all A pretty party A cumming out of Sorts Your own daughter Tisha, A slender slice of Cheesecake at only Twelve you dressed her In a scandalously skimpy Leotard to show how fair Her fairness at The county fairs As she tumbled and tossed And twisted for Senators and Bankers, Lawyers, and Aldermen She spun the mat Spun their heads As you collected Bids Somebody loved her Tisha Even the rat he was Drowning in the backyard pool The stubborn madam Wouldn't let such sentiment Stand in her way Somebody loved them all Tisha Bleu Somebody Not you Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was deep, movingly powerful- YOU ROCK!!!! I read much on this...very wicked is the way of some...you've brought this to life... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow,this is a very powerful piece of work! Keep it up! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is powerful writing...and hurt to read. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-21-2000).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks all... very much... a true story I'm afraid... as a poem though -- I think I need to tweak it some... Thanks again |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Geesh Rebel....I have always been a big fan of your work, but man, you blew me away with this one. Excellent piece of writing here Sir  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Don't you dare tweak this one!!!! I like it just the way it stands... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rebel~ Powerfully you have dredged emotions with this poem. The story had to be a tough one to deal with ... but deal with it you did ! It will be interesting to see what you tweak. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I guess what I'd consider tough to deal with was living in a town where almost everybody knew this and nobody did anything... and I was one of the nobodies... but, twas long, long, ago... I'm sure nothing like that goes on now.. (yeah right) thanks for the read all...!! and the compliments |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Great jumpin' day Guy, you're good! I read this yesterday, and sat there with a reply...backspace (too trite)...reply...backspace (too trite)...reply... Eventually gave up, since I couldn't think of anything that wouldn't sound horridly trite. Saw it again today, and ugh! It actually made me mad, carried more impact on the second and third read. An excellent poem about a brutal subject, you've created here. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Wow!!! 'Bout knocked me over with this one!! It's so sad and it makes me angry!! Wonderfully written and I wouldn't change a thing. Packs a lot just as it is!! Really does make one think. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~GOOD~Work~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The intensity of this work demands a multitude of readings, LR... I like it when a poet does tnat to me... You're quite versatile, my friend |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
My name was .... HUSG [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 03-22-2000).] |
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