TORNADO (written by my 10 year old)

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #6

TORNADO (written by my 10 year old)

Breathe~
Member

since 2000-02-05

Posts 315
Washington...

0 posted 2000-03-20 11:36 PM

My daughter Joriann read this to me on our way home from her school today. This is her first poem and I am rather proud of her, I must admit!

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

TORNADO
By Joriann K. Blackwell

Lightening strikes the night sky
like the angry crack of a bullwhip.
Screams of the wild wind
rip at ears of frightened people.
Thunder shakes the ground like a giant stomp.
“Where’s my child!”
A woman desperately cries
over the screaming wind.
“TORNADO!”
People shriek.
A child’s wail is heard in the distance.
As the woman unites
with her frightened child,
the tunnel of demons shrieks
louder and louder as it comes closer.
People look just in time
to see their homes
get swallowed up into the darkness
by the tunnel of demons.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-03-21 12:28 PM

This child deserves a feather quill...
WOW!

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-03-21 11:23 AM

This is excellent writing!! You should be proud, Breathe! Joriann should certainly continue to write and share it with us!

Denise

MyPenNameIsSam
Member

since 2000-03-06

Posts 94
usa

3 posted 2000-03-21 01:35 PM

She's only 10? And she wrote that?? Wow,... I'm speechless...
-molly aka sam

Fleeting World
"Thus shall ye think of all this fleeting world:
A star at dawn, a bubble in a stream;
A flash of lightning in a summer cloud,
A flickering lamp, a phantom, and a dream."
-from the Diamond Sutra, translated by : A. F. Price -- found in Teachings of The Buddha, edited by Jack Kornfield

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

4 posted 2000-03-21 02:40 PM

Blessed you are to have a daughter so talented, this poem is full of strength and images so intense. Thanks for sharing her abilities here with us.

AndreaA02
New Member

since 2000-03-21

Posts 8
Corpus Christi, TX

5 posted 2000-03-21 03:57 PM

Keep your eye on this talented child...She is obviously quite special.

~Andrea

busylisa_ca
Junior Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 39

6 posted 2000-03-21 08:03 PM

Wonderful insight for such a young child. One word....TALENTED!

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.