Teatime War (one of my best ones yet, SO READ)

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Blondie
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since 1999-08-06

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Ohio

0 posted 2000-03-20 04:00 PM

A spinster and her closest friend
Her name unknown to me,
Confided truths with the utmost trust
Upon their noontime tea,
Their cheeks they had grown sallow
Their locks a deadened grey,
Muscles sagged abundantly
Upon that fine spring day,
Now it may be due to season
Or a smell upon the air,
That wakened some nostalgia
The facts are quite unclear.
But alas they chatted secretly
Of days so long ago,
When eyes were bright and cheeks aflush
With that youthful sort of glow,

I know not why they argued
As both seemed right to me,
But alas they could not compromise
Nor were they willing to concede.
It seems the subject that on hand
Aroused the long debate,
Was something of a paradox
Which to all of us relates,
Love was the word that waged the war
Between the two old dears,
They spilled their treasures openly
And sniffled back their tears,
“You see,” said she named Ester
“I knew not love could die,
I thought it burned eternally”
She cackled ‘neath the sky.

“Beneath a waxing moon one night
A summer long ago,
A romance never meant to be
Began slowly to unfold,
I met him once, that’s all it took
To bind my heart to his,
Our eyes did meet, our hands did touch
We sealed it with a kiss,
The balmy night enfolded us
The stars watched from above,
The moon did glow romantically
That’s how we fell in love,
Within his arms I found myself
I felt that I might swoon,
But completely unbeknownst to me
Twas’ the dark side of the moon,
We spent out days together
Too few they do seem now,
Until at last it ended
I can’t admit to knowing how,
It was then that I did realize
In the dark hours this truth I gained,
A sourest lesson I ever learned
A waxing moon must wane.”
“Tsk. Tsk.” said she that listened close
“I hate to disagree,
But I find I have a problem
With your love philosophy,
It’s something there inside us
Once ignited it’s set free,
You can never take it back
It lives eternally,
I do not agree that love can die
Here’s a story of my own,
You’ll see once I have shared it
I’ll drive my point right home...”
“We grew up along the coast
We courted near the sea,
It was a match designed in heaven
We were happy, him and me,
The summer we had set the date
His eyes would never see,
Oh cruelest fate, you dealt the blow
That took my love from me,
He transcended up to heaven
But within his heart was mine,
Love was made to last forever
To forsake it is a crime.”

Now the argument got heated
Each defending their own side,
Of love and hate and broken hearts
Between their words they cried,
The debate went on ‘till midnight
But the war was not yet done,
They disagreed throughout their lives
At teatime ‘neath the sun,
One dear, she died that summer
Her friend, the following one,
But they never reached agreement
Even when their day had come,
Now some may choose one side
While others disagree
Many can’t decide
But the answers clear to me,
To each his own, think what you will
But I feel that I must say,
Wouldn’t you rather live your life
Than wile it away?

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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1 posted 2000-03-20 04:25 PM

BRAVO This is excellent, Blondie!! What a wonderful tale and a fabulous ending!! Wise words!!

Denise

Blondie
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since 1999-08-06

Posts 307
Ohio

2 posted 2000-03-20 04:52 PM

Thank you so much Denise...I actually wrote this awhile ago but I have been changing things and changing them back for weeks.

Cutie Putootie
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 54
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3 posted 2000-03-20 04:54 PM

Wonderful work Melissa! This is one of the best poems I have read in this forum, I think you've found a hidden talent writing in this form. Why didn't you ever show this to me? huh? why?

Blondie
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since 1999-08-06

Posts 307
Ohio

4 posted 2000-03-20 07:24 PM

I like to think I have some secrets to myself

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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5 posted 2000-03-20 08:51 PM

I wouldn't change a thing! I think it is perfection!

Denise

Blondie
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since 1999-08-06

Posts 307
Ohio

6 posted 2000-03-20 08:55 PM

thanks so much denise! It means a lot

Mistikman
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since 2000-01-10

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San Jose, CA, USA

7 posted 2000-03-20 09:39 PM

This is phenominal Blondie, we should all have so much talent.

Blondie
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since 1999-08-06

Posts 307
Ohio

8 posted 2000-03-20 09:44 PM

thanks so much mistikman, but believe me it wasn't easy to write this poem.

Cutie Putootie
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 54
Ohio

9 posted 2000-03-21 08:30 PM

I just have to post a reply just so it'll go back up to the top because everytime I read this poem I notice how wonderful it is...great, great, great work!

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

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Glen Hope, PA USA

10 posted 2000-03-22 10:54 AM

I really enjoyed this one. Nicely done

Blondie
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since 1999-08-06

Posts 307
Ohio

11 posted 2000-03-22 03:25 PM

Thanks Hoot!

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