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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-03-20 06:53 AM


Width Times Distance

Waterfall of lovers
kiss
cascading hidden
emotions
into raging wild
fire
falling with extreme
passion
to the vastly unexplored
flowing
riverbed of harmony's
pleasure.

Floating in a constant stream
of desire
upon the inflated innertube
of life
casting sunbaked doubts
haphazardly
toward the jagged
rocks
that threaten to destroy
simple happiness.

The strength of the rivers
undertow
brings realities
depth
back to sensible
view
the width times
distance
keeps happiness alive
forever.

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WhtDove
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1 posted 2000-03-20 11:03 AM


I love it! I love the the imagery you used here, specially the second stanza! Wow!
Denise
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2 posted 2000-03-20 01:39 PM


Finally, I can get in and respond!! This is absolutely beautiful Gloria!! Such imagery! Very lovely!!

Denise

Balladeer
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3 posted 2000-03-20 11:10 PM


Dreamer, this imagery is second to none! It's obvious you put a lot of work into its creation....and it came out very well. Applause and appreciation here.  
Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 2000-03-21 06:13 AM


WhtDove: Thank You very much, glad you liked it.

Denise: Thank You for always having wonderful compliments, I'm glad you liked this one.

Balladeer: Thank You most kindly Sir, you floored me with your reply coming from a man with the talent you have it meant a great deal to hear your applause.

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-03-21 07:05 AM


Lost Dreamer~
I like the mathmatical equation here.
Great designing images for sure.
Simply superb !
~*Marge*~


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WhtDove
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6 posted 2000-03-21 10:09 AM


Too good to fade away, so BUMP!  
wayoutwalt
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7 posted 2000-03-21 10:14 AM


i thought twas gonna be how when yuh get older (distance) yuh get fatter (width) but this an imagery bonanza!!
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2000-03-21 10:24 AM


Gloria...wow, this is wonderful. I think this is amoung my favorite of all your works...good job  
Michael
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9 posted 2000-03-21 12:48 PM


Wow, Gloria, this is one of your best in my opinion.  Love the "Inflated innertube of life" line.  That coming from one who's hit some pretty sharp rocks ya know!     Good poem.


Michael

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