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Genetics knell
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Genetics knell |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Genetics Knell Dwindling the shadows fell, Deepening the Zinfandel. Painting brindle on the wall, A mantilla's lacy shawl. Behind the fan her eyes aglow, Her bosom rose each breath in show. And the ecstasy smoked my eyes. And crossed my face in lusty sly. I spoke to her in lovers muse, Little things of little views. Attempting in a subtle way, To touch her heart in secret play. The acid of her beauty ran, Across the gentle moving fan. And ate into the soul of me, With golden shards of filigree. And I was caught genetics knell, A victim of hormonal dwell. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Oh Sy....you do have a way with words...and filigree is so nice to work with.  HUGS I love the way I look in your eyes, I'm just me tho'... We are all works in progress, no? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful, lyrical and touching as always... loved the ending by the way...I could absolutely smell crisply starched lace... lovely... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sy Sy Sy that vocab is getting WAY out of control! What an explorative poem this is - I did enjoy, I did. Well done as usual.  K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very well done, sir. Was that lusty sly or lusty Sy?? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
ROTFLMAO.... Sy - I love reading your poems.. and I always look forward to your final couplet..  This one takes the cake, my friend... "hormonal dwell", indeed.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rainbow, You do have a way with comments. *L* Serenity, You always add a little bit of serenity to your comments. *L* Severn, You really think so? Thank you. *L* Balladeer, It was a little bit of both, nice comment. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, Rainbow thiks that filigree Is something really great to see Serenity knows very well The smell was from the Zinfandel Kamla says your Poem gives A hint of the "explorative" She thinks the poet as a whole Is getting way out of control And Balladeer's lusty reply Is badgering the lusty Sy He thinks the "lusty sly" you sung Was a lusty sly slip of the tongue And Nan dwells on "hormonal dwell" And she knows poetry very well And so I sit here on the brink And I just don't know what to think I think that your hormonal well Is laden with hormonal dwell You're gettimg quite explorative The more sly lusty words you give And we are in hormonal dwell Still reeling from the Zinfendel So Sy, I don't know what to say I hope you have a lusty day Loved the poem Love ya Liz |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Heh, excellent work Sy, now I need to go find my dictionary to understand the rest of the poem |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Creatively expressed, your desires but I fancy 'twas more than Zin, fanned Lust's fires ~ Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Me thinks behind the fan is where that lusty sly Sy's hormonal dwells...and what a wonderful sigh of a lover's muse you have. Wonderful poem!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I love cake with my ZIN. *L* Sy Elizabeth, I am overwhelmed by your poem. You have such a quick mind, It often blinds. I trust the touch of wonderlust, The upthrust of its windy gust, Did not disturb the birds and bees. Or add weight to some whiffletree. Love Sy Mistikman, By all means check with the dictionary, Thank you for the comment. Meadow, Drink helps feed the fires of Zin. *L* Martie, I love you dearly. Thank you Sy |
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