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Love Through Laced Glass
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Love Through Laced Glass |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Love Through Laced Glass Someone knocked… The stairs were not carpeted, the pattern her tapping feet made was as familiar as the cadence of her voice. Through the laced glass she saw a man silhouetted in slender strength looking, looking towards the red rock sunset which melted like crayons left in hot summer sun. She opened the door and heard his voice, tender from a dream she had forgotten, and saw his eyes smile brown and direct from skin like a rice paper map. She could feel the fingertip fragile touch to trace each line to its beginning in her glancing. Her frolicking hair was in her eyes, and she tucked loose strands, as if importance curled her identity into a wisp that flew into his space and made her feelings visible. His hands were big with calluses nestled into the curve of his palm as he drank coffee from her dear china cup. He looked at the worn glass, dusty with buried days, and a marble, colored like bright fish and a pickle jar of burnt orange sand she had set on the counter. He seemed to understand, and the sweetness that came toward her in the kitchen as the sun fell into time was as familiar as the pattern her tapping feet made on the stairs. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh Martie! This is so beautiful! You portrayed "that silent understanding" so perfectly! (And speaking of perfect, it FLOWED like coffee into a cup! Presentation? Perfect as china!) {Serenity exits, grinning.) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lots of splendid lines in this one. I assume it's her father? I read this in different ways. Perhaps you would fill me in. You are a wonder Love ya Liz |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful Martie! I could picture the scene in my mind! Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--thank you for understanding the meaning of two souls meeting who already know each other and the sweet comments. Liz--It could be her father, brother or soul mate...it's fiction...so you can finish the scene...and you are the wonder!! love you too Denise--I'm so glad you could picture this...and enjoyed it. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Lovely picture.... settling into those "comfy, familiar, niches..."..  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'Her frolicking hair was in her eyes, and she tucked loose strands, as if importance curled her identity into a wisp that flew into his space and made her feelings visible' Familiarity of meeting one who you just know you've known before ... lovely image-laced work my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very beautiful images painted here, Martie! Corinne |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Aw, you're not such a big deal. Anyone with the talent of six poets, a mind that would put Solomon to shame, a heart the size of Texas and the four surrounding states and a brain that would make Einstein look like Forrest Gump could do just as well....almost.  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Nan--thank you for the lovely comment. Marge--that was my favorite part too-- Corrinne--I really enjoy your poetry, thank you. Balladeer--St Patrick's Day is over, and you still have all that left over blarney...well you can give it to me anytime. You are so sweet! |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
Perfect! This made me think of someone I know and I think I need to make a phone call. Great poem Raven |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Exquisite ... Exceptional .... So very beautiful ..... Martie ... Wow .. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is an amazing work of art...I loved every line. Butterflies don't cry Are they more blessed than I? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Great images here Martie, this is superb!! loved it!  What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There's a popular saying that familiarity breeds contempt... your poem is testament that with love it can also breed contentment. This is beautiful, Martie. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Raven--Glad I reminded you to mkae that phone call. Shannon--Wow, so many wonderful words..thanks Butterflies don't cry--thank you so much for such a sweet comment. DA--I'm so glad that you loved this poem. suthern--I've heard that saying and I hope contentment is the case.. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew girl....you leave me breathless at times with your imagery |
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