Open Poetry #6 |
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On Dying |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion ![]() |
Some hold the hands of the dying, look into it’s vacant face, although it no longer resembles the loved ones we can’t replace. Some cannot look into those eyes smiling wanly, masking pain, they understand how it hurts us, and pray we don’t feel shame. They are the peaceful ones, now, while we are left to marshal on, so carry with you their spirits that’s what love is built upon. © 2000 CM Bailey |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne, you see so clearly and it is so, death and dying are hard to look at...yet it is somewhere we all travel. You write so well and I loved the last stanza! ... so carry with you their spirits that’s what love is built upon. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Dear Corinne, This is a touching poem with a strong message at it's closing. Nicely done. Poeminister |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This is beautiful Corinne! A very good way to think of those we love who have passed to a better place. It reminds me very much of my Dad. Marina |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you Martie, Poeminister and Marina! Corinne |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Corinne....what more can I say? Your words said it all. Very touching....brings back memories of those that are lost. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful and comforting, Corinne. I especially loved the last two lines also! My heart needed to hear those words! Thank you. Denise |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sweet Corinne, this is a very warm, and a loving sentiment. Thanks for sharing this. Parker |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Lovely tears upon the page. You touch us with your poetry. Carrying the ~spirit~ ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Dear Lone Wolf, Denise, Parker and Marge, thank you! XOXO Corinne |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Corinne Wise words softly spoken this is exactly how it is tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
Thank you so much, Corinne. Rick |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I think this one qualifies as one of your best. Your opening verse is astounding (as is the rest)... Having seen that vacant stare, it really hits home with me... Thanks.. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Words of love and truth. We do carry on their spirits and love. It goes on and on. A wonderful poem, Corinne Liz |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem... very well done! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Tracie. Rick, most welcome, sweet poetry man. Why thank you, Nan. Technically, it has some flaws, but my heart was in it, if that counts for anything! LOL Thanks much, Liz and Suthern. Corinne |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
You make death beautiful if one can do such a thing ![]() |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Very touching poem on life's final journey. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you kindly, Hoot and Danny. Cor |
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