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Forever in this Lasting of Me
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Forever in this Lasting of Me |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Forever in this Lasting of Me I have fallen into your eyes and now you say it’s time to close them and flow across time’s eternity, lost except to memory and withered sweet decay. Take me with you to that place of grace, part the curtain and let me see your angel wings in motion glazed with the tears that I have made. The sound you breathe holds such tenderness it will feather across my dreaming if you bring in sleep this song for my gathering. If I could keep your laugh that has rippled and whistled ‘cross my pond, I’d hold it safe in black mantilla lace with butterflies and silk in a drawer that love opens. Then your dark frailty would not find weeping in this stabbing that bleeds me dry, and time’s precious minutes that in daring tick you out would be forever in this lasting of me. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Immeasurably sad! Left me near tears..... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I once told Seymour that to live a fortnight with his muse would be heavenly ... I now pay you the same compliment. You have the most unique way of walking through an experience with feather-light steps. No one, whose writings I'm familiar with, does it quite like you. One of the treasures of belonging to this wonderful family of pssionate poets is the pleasure of having met you and your poetry. This particular poem is so soft that it calls my name and I have to turn my ear to the wind to be certain that it whispered my name. I smile in knowing that it did. This is just perfection in poetry on display. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, The essence of cycloramos beauty. Exquisite. *L* Sy |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
There is something in your phrase "the lasting of me," and indeed, in the entire work, Martie, that feels so real in the reading of this delicacy. Beautiful, thank you. ~ Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Pdv--it is immeasurably sad Marge--What a wonderful thing to say..if I knew where my muse was half the time then I would share gladly. Sy--your words make my heart happy Claire--your sweet comments are alway appreciated! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
So sad yet so lovely ... only you Martie, only you 'sigh' Love, Shannon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, It is quite obvious where your muse is. It is in your heart. But your poetic brilliance comes from heart and mind, and both are exquisite. All the great poets of this forum recognize your exceptional talents. You are an amazing poet, an amazing woman, and I am so proud to call you my friend. Love Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I'm with Marge, your poetry makes me want to come to your house, discuss poetry and thoughts and compose. Your spirit is a gentle one, and your use of imagery is something I inspire to reach towards. Corinne |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
A truly wonderful but sad piece Martie. You express yourself so well. Marina |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Shannon--thank you for sighing with me Liz--Your friendship is cherished along with your words Corinne--Come on over--where do you live? I'd love to see you and talk about what a talented poet you are. Marina--Sad yes, but about loving, so happy. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Why does it have to hurt so much? Thanks for sharing this heartfelt beautiful piece, Martie. Denise |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Such emotional intensity you impart, my friend.. Very nicely done..  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I can feel this sadness papable to my touch- I can taste it in my tongue- Feel it in my gut - It wrenches my heart- I know it is real - but more significantly - that you could pen such sadness with such beauty - leaves me breathless |
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