Open Poetry #6 |
Recall |
Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
It is the warmth of a summered day and it swims to me your memory and the smile that recalls the taste of childhood trees and safety the autumn susurrates near carrying her leaves and brown lit hues immortalising the shed tears of the love-barren I’m braving the loss and the beat of steps solitude makes yes I can perform through the false heat that will seep from tomorrow raise my hands and let the sun take the life of crickets and the imprint of you to another place [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 03-16-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Uh, let me borrow that hand when you're done with it. There's an imprint over here that needs removing...LOL Severn, as always, you take my breath away. This tingled. "braving the loss", indeed. michael |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Wow ... exquisite. You engraved your signature all overthis one. Fantastic. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Raintime New Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 3New York |
Severn - until now I had never thought of Summer as something which might be performed upon one. I particularly like your linebreaks and indents - the way with which pauses allow memory to filter in. Where is 'another place' and how do we get there? I love this. Thank you. R.T |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Kamla, I am at a loss for words, this is breathtaking and so very beautiful. Excellent as always Soul-Sis. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Kamla...this is a beautful work you have crafted here. Enchanting and tender, your heart shows through your words |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla, please pass the oxygen--I think I need it more than you do--this poem is remardable... ...let the sun take the life of crickets and the imprint of you.. wonderful! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Breath taking Kamla. Wondeful piece. Is there a place and if you find the way, will you show me? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I wanna go, too!! This is beautiful, Kamla. My awe for your work continues. oops! Speaking of recall, I recall I owe you a letter COMING!!!!! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Oh my Kamla .... Once again your words leave me breathless and in amazement of your exquisite talent ..... Superb .. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, With just the simplest of touch, You took away my dreamers crutch. Bravo a wonderful poem. *L* Sy |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You travel to such mystical places, Severn, very intriguing to the mind and senses! Corinne |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is beatuiful Severn. . .the summer holds many dreams and rememberances for most of us, well done. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Michael - hehe, of course you can and thankyou, that was a really nice thing to say. Marge(y) - cheers sweetie! RT - You know that other place I think is somewhere where one can forget the crap and all of the precious memories become real again - some kind of invented heaven? I don't know. Thankyou. Soul Sis - thanks dear. Ruth - wow - enchanting is a beautiful label to attach - thanks! Martie - that's it my friend, it's off to the hospital we go... thankyou. Marilyn - If I ever do then I certainly will - same goes - you find one then please tell me!! 'Deer - humph! Still waiting! Hehe - thanks slowish One. Shannon - I really appreciate that, thankyou so much. Sy - Master of poetry, what can I say - I am the dreamer's nemesis! Thanks my friend. Corinne - yes, but there are so many hard roads...thnakyou Sven - hey, nice to hear your voice - indeed I am inclined to agree. Thankyou. K |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful recall, Severn! Denise |
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