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If You Were my Girl
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If You Were my Girl |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
If you were my girl there are so many things that I would love to do I'd open my heart to make a new start to prove my love for you I'd climb a tall peak and tell all the land how you set my heart a whirl And I'd do so much more with a gleam in my eye if only you were my girl If you were my girl a shower of love is all that you would see I'd do different things like push you in swings because you'd mean that much to me I know in your arms is where I would find my troubles would unfurl And I'd sleep good at night consumed with delight with the thought of you as my girl If you were my girl I know we would share a love that would out last time It would be so awesome to watch our love blossom like the words within this rhyme I would be so weak as to sneak a peek at your beauty my wonderful pearl And lost in love I would be with thee if you chose to be my girl G. A. Webb Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Hi all. Just to set the record straight, I did not write this for anybody. I did it just to prove to myself that I still could write love poems. That's what made this one so hard to write because I have no love inspiration to go by. I have written so many anti-love poems as of late that I thought that I couldn't write a positive one again. I'll admit that it's not my best work, but maybe one day when I find love again I'll be able to write one that is better. Anyways, I hope you like it. Thank you. G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
G.A.~ Sweetheart .... you'll have NO trouble getting her attention with 'sigh-makers' like this ! Loved it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
G. I for one really like it! It's sweet and romantic and light enough to be handled and not scare the girl away, yet serious enough to let her know that she is welcome to stay. I think it's wonderful. BTW love the pic! Had to zoom in 3 times to get a good look! Cute kids too. Thanks for the read. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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NewbiePoetGuy Junior Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 13Thousand Oaks, Ca, USA |
Very Good Poem, I loved it. This really was one of those poems that makes me think of every love ive ever had and lost to uncontrollable circumstances, thanks for the read keep up the good writing Larry |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You could have fooled me! This is great! Sure sounds like a man in love to me! (save it to give to that special one when she comes along!) Denise |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Thank you all so much for your kind words. Hopefully one day I'll find that special some one to give this to, wish me luck. But in the mean time I think I'll hang on to it. Thanks again! G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is so nice...it really is. Well done! 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I read this with almost a nostalgic aire...I do enjoy the innocence and sincerity that this piece offers. And as for your post script, I can relate. ~ Claire |
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Glorfindel Junior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 22Auckland, New Zealand |
Well, if this is what you write withOUT inspiration, LOOK OUT when it comes along!! Good stuff. Glorf. |
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Glorfindel Junior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 22Auckland, New Zealand |
Well, if this is what you write withOUT inspiration, LOOK OUT when it comes along!! Good stuff. Glorf. Let winds rage, seas boil and years curse, My love shal live everyoung in my verse. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hey G.A.Webb almost every girl I meet I fall in love with so I have plenty of inspiration...but I didn't say that they fall in love with me...so I have plenty of frustration. I'm getting lots of practice anyway. I feel a lot like that old song sometimes "I'll Never Fall In Love Again." James |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
WOW! I really didn't expect this kind of a responce on a piece that I thought was OK at best. Thank you all very much!!! I'm glad you liked it.  G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
G- I just came across this one, and like it, I did!! I thought this was very romantic and sweet. Save it for the girl who captures your heart, and is worth of you! Best of luck to you hon. Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
"I did not write this for anybody"....shucks, and there was me about to try on the shoe to see if it fitted....  HUGS I love the way I look in your eyes, I'm just me tho'... We are all works in progress, no? |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
goodness...you are sooooo sweet...very nicely done G  |
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