Open Poetry #6 |
As The Season Turns |
Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Chilling mine ache-drenched soul; Bleeding mine heart o' love still sheathed winter-she biting frosty to taste in eager lust o' mine hurt on which feeds she ~ this time finale ~ Amazed I, at the damn'ed pow'r o' justification (feeling empty-cold) is it thus, that her self-illusion lies sleeping too closely to reality? eye to eye shim'ring reflections o' she exudes anger o' her freeze which deforms this world ‘round her frigid un-aware an' so- in painful recognition o' truth; "as I entered through strength, so shall I exit- through fear..." |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
OOHH....~ And I am left feeling frigid with this one~ Brrr~ What a beautiful, uniquely written poem~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Beautifully written... and very unique (as Mariee said) I'd take a stab at responding but I'm afraid that I may perhaps be interpreting it incorrectly. I liked it though very well written. -molly aka sam< !signature--> "One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide [This message has been edited by MyPenNameIsSam (edited 03-14-2000).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is dripping of emotion Chris...you OK??? Hang in there hun, and let the sun melt away the sadness!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Chris~ Such an interesting pouring forth. Intriguing. Seasons of the heart do change ... thank goodness. Beautifully formatted. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Marie - Thank you, that was the express effect I was searching for! Sam (molly) - It's my firm belief that a reader cannot misinterpret a poem! Thank you! Devina - I'm ok, and waiting for the summer heat! Marge - Thank goodness indeed! Thank you! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ouch Chris. I think I am frost bitten! *shiver* Amazing as always, my friend. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Man, I tell you what - you sure know how to slam a poem home. This was awesome, Chris. Knopw the chill and the fear aspect all too well. Michael |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Im not normally a big fan of free verse, but this was excellent Christopher. Well done! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ouch...this one carries its own slap. Nicely written and powerful |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I'm not going to tell you that this poem is fantastic! *though it is* I'm not going to tell you that I love the form and the imagery! *though I do* And I'm not going to tell you that you are a great guy who manages to write magnificently every time you sit down in front of a computer! *though I think you are!* |
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Ixtab Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 105MEXICAlpan de las tunas |
Chilling mine-ached drenched soul What a way to start a poem! Bravo, one of the best I've read. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
If the mark of a great poet is being able to come up with unique ways to express thoughts, you qualify without question. |
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