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The Gloom Of The Day
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The Gloom Of The Day |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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The Gloom Of The Day The gloom of the day is festering my mood I feel I'm starting to become sadly unglued, a roaring thunder becoming clearly evident I hide slyly knowing I need to stay prudent. I feel I'm starting to become sadly unglued normally I myself can act relatively shrewd, the weather effects my interior mannerism throwing off my usual outward mechanism. A roaring thunder becoming clearly evident leaving me shattered in fear of the moment I retreat to the couch hiding under cushions as I feel the thunderous deep repercussions. I hide slyly knowing I need to stay prudent for I excelled at being a straight A student, yet as my inner persistent feelings interlude the gloom of the day is festering my mood. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Girl, you'd better brighten up ! I need for you to smile.  Too much gloom and too much doom will get you after while. Throw it in a corner and gladly walk away ... practice a great big smile  then you've surely earned your 'A'. Love you ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Now this is one of the best 'form' poems I've read! Usually I don't like them but you've done a great job with this one.. I'll send you some sunshine, ok? |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
The Gloom is gone my smile replaces in clear skies the suns smile traces. My mood returns to peaceful realms now Mr. Warm Sunshine overwhelms. In clear skies the suns smile traces bringing smiles to once gloomy faces, mine included is much more brighter as the sun makes everything lighter. My mood returns to peaceful realms as I happily admire two flowering elms. I smile to you and thank you kindly you all are so very nice and friendly. Now Mr. Warm Sunshine overwhelms all natural beauty within glowing realms I invite all to share in delightful graces the gloom is gone my smile replaces. I Thank You very much, I am having fun playing with this form right now. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The weather always affects my mood too--I enjoyed both your poems, and I'm glad you are feeling more sunny. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Isn't it funny how the weather can affect us like that? I'm glad you are smiling again! Great poems, Gloria! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LostDreamer~ Gosh ! Now I can breath easy Your persona light n' breezy All decked out in full array another full of sunshine day It is nice to see your smile grinning back, just a while Glad to see you can have fun verses giving forms free run ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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