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Story of the Stars (my attempt at epic )
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Story of the Stars (my attempt at epic ) |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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Long ago twas written when the books of time were made these things on which the foundation of our history was laid. In a far and distant land across the great seas a knight was born to misery. Darkness was his companion his ever present company he could never find the light life was such agony. Alas on this our homeland a maiden was also born she too knew the darkness so alone and forlorn. It was prophecized the two would one day meet he'd slay a dragon at the maidens feet "Dark shall meet dark and cause a spark of light that never will grow dim will only grow more bright" As was fortold one day their paths crossed out in a wooded glade where she had become lost. She was trapped in the corner by a vile ugly beast he felled it with his sword and the fates were released. The wind began to blow and soothe their battered souls and whispered to them secrets of what the prophecy fortold "Dark shall meet dark and cause a spark of light that never will grow dim will only grow more bright" One would surely think the battle had been won but rest assured my child the story's not yet done... The two darkened souls felt an immediate bond and of each other they grew quite fond. But they had erected walls to block out their pain and though they were trying to trust these walls still remained. He would do anything Would walk the extra mile whatever it took to make his maiden smile. And the same held true for her too for her knight there was nothing she wouldn't do. But still there were doubts wondering "why" and in the darkness you could hear their souls cry. The kinght grew unsure ho could not stay so under the cover of night he quietly slipped away. The maiden was heartbroken yet she never gave up hope clinging to his memory so that she could somehow cope. The knight traveled across great many lands but could not forget the gentle touch of his maidens hand. The wind still whispered its prophetic litany and reassured their souls this is the way it would be. "Dark shall meet dark and cause a spark of light that never will grow dim will only grow more bright" At night he was haunted by his maidens face he needed to see her again this decided he set off at a deadly pace. He went to the glade but found her not there his heart grew heavy maybe she didnt care. Just then in the silence he heard a womans scream he quickly withdrew his sword moving as if in a dream. He went through the forest and over the hill and there lay his maiden so deathly still. He ran towards her but was stopped in his tracks a dragon appeared and began to attack. The dragon roared his voice the deamons of hell a sound so horrifying yet the knight knew it well. A battle ensued blood was shed but in the end the knight had the dragons head. He placed it at the feet of his maiden so fair and knelt to stroke a lock of her golden hair. A tear left his eye and traveled down his face suddenly things grew quiet and his heart began to race. The wind began to whisper furiously you can't give up, you can't and the forest was filled with the unrelenting chant. "Dark shall meet dark and cause a spark of light that never will grow dim will only grow more bright" The maidens eyes began to flutter her chest to rise and fall thsi must be a miracle she was not dead at all. She looked into her knights eyes and saw love shining there she whispered "I love you - don't be afraid to care" They stared into each others eyes and the walls came tumbling down the forest had grown silent once again not even a sound. He bent to kiss her forhead and was blinded by a light that seemed to pulse and radiate and only grow more bright. Out of this apperation a sage did appear and bid them silently come closer come near. As they stepped closer he said "Be not afraid- I wish to share with you this light yu have made" He took all the tears they had ever shed and erased every sad thought from their heads. He stretched his closed fist to the dark night sky slowly unclasped his hand and they began to fly. They landed in the sky and began to twinkle with such light and that my child is how we got the beautiful stars at night. ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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mystery Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 79 |
This piece grew so long that I had to re-read it! You should write stories because I trully enjoyed yours, it had a nice twist to it. Keep up the nice work. |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Thanks Mystery ... I've tried the story thing but I lose interest so fast either that or my brain starts working overtime trying to fit in all different kinds of plots and twists and turns and I end up with a jumbled heap !!  ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
StarrGazer, I enjoyed this very much ! |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Ahhhh you found my secret soft spot..knights and dragons and princesses and fantasy. I loved reading this, and the tale of two soul mates destined to be was lovely! and the ending of the stars in the sky - perfection! Thanks Starr Gazer for posting this "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Okay...how do you guys do that, think I met my match with the epic....will take my F and go home with my reportcard and try to explain to my son why I couldn't do it |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
As we wind up our month of epic poetry, I had to bring this wonderful work up... front and center... You've written a dazzling tale, StarrGazer - and I certainly believe that this is where stars come from... I enjoyed this read very much.. I hope we don't disappoint you when we take on something a little lighter for our next round...  |
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