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Open Poetry #6

Resting my soul

monique
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 369
Louisiana

0 posted 2000-03-08 02:41 AM

The tranquility of the moment
Is transporting me in another time
Series of hocus bogus pocus
Relationships that I cannot consume
Fully to the maximum security

Desire attires my face
To unlock the truth
About your feelings
For me
Whore of the mind

Approaching the end of my life
On earth blowing her scent
My way to be buried
Under
Her blanket of dirt

I curse the day of my conception
Crumbs for the birds
Attacking my legs
So I won't walk the street at night
Looking for love
In clothing so pretty
Shining my sign
Come on in

You are welcome to love me
At no charge for the fun
Of enjoying life so freely
That no gold can buy
Love real love
From the bottomless pits
Of hell burning for you and me
Eternel feeling of emptiness

The tranquility of the moment
Carrying me to sea
Questioning where I belong
In this world of seizures
Causing my children to jerk
Their little body so innocent
So much pain for them to endure
God were are you?

monique

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

1 posted 2000-03-08 05:43 PM

Wow, where do I begin? There is so much emotion pouring from this, I don't know what to mention first? Fabulous style you have, you have a way of painting vivid pictures of expression in the reader's mind! You don't see that too often, unfortunately. I loved several parts of this, how you used descriptive, even painful words to paint your images....I'm in awe.
"Buried under her blanket of dirt..." Wow.....I like that...only one of my favorite parts! Great stuff!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2000-03-08 06:38 PM

A portrait of emotional turmoil, monique,
(and I should know, lol!) More of this, please, as I enjoyed it very much.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2000-03-09 05:02 AM

Monique this is interesting to read. I hope you find some rest for your soul. James

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