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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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Apart ~First Knight~ My phone rang out today, and it was everyone but you. My stomach fell each time as I am feeling blue. My pager beeped today, and I wished it had been you. It was only the low battery, and beeped upon this cue. A lady looked at me today, with a smile upon her face. If only you would look at me, and touch me with your grace. Time passed so slow today, with each hour like a day. Alone I sit and wait for you, crying along the way. A pain felt in my chest today, a breaking of my heart. Nothing can fix the way I feel, as long as we're apart. There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Rosalind Palafox
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MemberPosts 88 |
Sad nice poem... "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sorry to read you're still blue first knight. Just remember she is only following her heart and if her heart wants to take her somewhere else that is her destiny. Its only good when two hearts that feel the same come together. Believe me...I've been thru this. Your poetry whether a happy theme or a sad theme is shining as usual. Take care. James |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This is sad Knight, cheer up...there are lots of juliets in their castles,love will find you when you least expect it!  Enjoyed the poem! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Rosalind Still trying to shake it off Jim. Thank you Romantic Heart. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is a very touching poem first-knight but I'm sorry I have to agree with James. The two hearts have to be beating as one my friend and if they aren't then there's always trouble  LoL and a HUG from me xxxKeep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David, my friend~ While this may be sad, I find your heart telling it like you feel it. Love often beats in the heart of only one waiting for the right heart to pick up the beat. When it comes again, and it will, you will know. 'My phone rang out today, and it was everyone but you.' I really like this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sigh... unrequited love. Been there, done that, don't envy you. Well written to wring out emotions and tears. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This poem captured the pain of waiting for love to be returned and time does stand still when that is what we are waiting for doesn't it. This is magnificent. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David...although this poem was very sad, I found it inspiring...as you will see from my post "Everything But You" It's hard to miss someone you care so much about, but I know the feeling well |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I agree Tracie. Marge you always have the nicest things to say to me THank you Chris and butterflies, Hoot....Believe me I know we are sharing the same feelings after reading your work done from mine  |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
So sad a post, a place where so many of us have been. ((Hugs)) Keep smiling my friend, someday someone special will smile back..  All of my life I've been searching for the words to say how I feel........ - Phil Collins. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Jascanvey There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Not sure how to respond to this one, knowing what I know. Sometimes love just isn't enough and words are just that until they are stood behind. Well written piece David. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Marilyn |
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Diana B Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 97 |
it shouldnt be this way...especially with spring blossoming just around the corner...and perhaps with that a love true for you... |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Diana. I know it should not be |
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