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Like a touch of mescaline
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Like a touch of mescaline |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Like a touch of mescaline Through the ferment on the lake, Ran the currents of awake. Moving all that float of green, To a picture of serene. Up above the clouds rode high And the moonlight lit the sky. Bringing magic unforeseen, To an Eden moments glean. Captive in its warm embrace, Thinking thoughts of wine and lace I was total with the scene. Like a touch of mescaline. And the wind brought leaves to gay, Dancing, turning, in ballet. Till a touch did stop my roam And I heard the words go home. I have fantasized before, But never with such soar. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I think I like the way you fantasize, Seymour...this one sends me... ~ Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
May your fantasies come true. Exceptional poetry, as only you can write Love ya Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Simply breathtaking, my friend. Within the touch of mescaline, visions not many eyes have seen. Turning thoughts to wings a'flight, bringing fantasies to light. Captivating me within the realm of the beauty of surround. Mesmerizing mind and tongue vivid thoughts have just begun. Soaring far beyond the me, sights before I've never seen. Winds of chance now blow me home, but, oh what freedom was my roam. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Oh, Seymour, I'm there! What a fabulous poem! Corinne |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, Why thank you Meadow and I have gone on some of yours. *L* Elizabeth, How many come true, I don't know But they are with me all the time, Love Sy Marge, Your poem was lovelier then mine, you should put it on the forum. *L* Corinne, I'm glad I could steal your mind for a moment. *L* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Seymour, methinks this is better than mescaline... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Seymore, you write the greatest poetry I've ever read. In some ways, your poetry has inspired me to be more artistic, complexic and creative. You've influence me to the point that I changed my style a little. My next poem on this board will pay homage to you my friend. Nathan |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have a magic place, dear Sy, and I'm so glad you share it with your words of grace. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This one makes me soar to read  |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Sy! Denise |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Sy: You had me going. I'm new here, so please take these suggestions with a grain of salt. Since mescaline is a powerful halucinogentic, I kind of expected a little more excitement/imagination. Example:"moonlight exploded in the sky" or "I embraced the total scene". The last two lines (I think) should be rewritten as they are weak. Again, only my two cents worth. best regards, bboog |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
One little touch will do it. Wonderful work, Sy...I'm soaring. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-09-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Me thinks so to, thank you. Nate, It is an honor to inspire you. I will look for your poem. Denice, Thank you sweet. *L* Hoot, Thank you for the beautiful comment. *L* bboog, I did,nt say I took the mescaline. Thanks for the critic. Michael, Thank you much Michael. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Keep soaring, Seymour... and thanks for taking us with you! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, I'll try *L* I'll try. |
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