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Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

0 posted 2000-03-07 07:24 PM


haiku 007

the chill air stirs
with a soundless shiver -
can you feel the rain?


haiku 008

no wind, no waves -
only soft silver moonlight
and my boat adrift.

[This message has been edited by Beki (edited 03-10-2000).]

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

1 posted 2000-03-08 04:30 AM

sorry guys this was getting buried without a single read so I bumped it up.......

anyone know why the font is so small?I just posted it like always

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 2000-03-08 11:04 AM

you can change the font size under the edit mode Beki....at the top where it says font size 2 (or what ever) make that number a 3.

I really liked these both...but most of all the second of the two...it is such a peaceful, relaxing picture you have created in it. You are indeed a master of Haiku. I do hope you've been publishing these as the market out there for good Haiku is vast

U K Hero
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since 1999-08-08

Posts 266
England

3 posted 2000-03-08 01:36 PM

I think there just fine; The more I see of this style the more I admire the effort that goes into it. Dont be disbonded by the lack of attention, its hard for some to appreciate
the thoughts and effort that go into such small delicate and imaginary pieces.

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

4 posted 2000-03-08 01:45 PM

Highly cool Beki... highly cool.... I like em short and sweet...

or tall and salty...

or medium and tangy...

or ... I just like em...

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

5 posted 2000-03-08 01:47 PM

Beki, no these should not have got buried, happens sometimes, I've noticed. Yes you should try and edit the font , my poor eyes arn't what they used to be.

I like them both, but the second one really conjours up the image so vividly.

Thank you for the image and that wonderful peaceful feeling I get thinking about it.
.............

no wind, no waves -
only soft silver moonlight
and my boat adrift.

...... I have a nice bottle of wine or two, a friend and this silver moonlight.

Parker

[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-08-2000).]

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

6 posted 2000-03-08 01:55 PM

Nicely done. Enjoyed them both muchly.

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

7 posted 2000-03-08 03:22 PM

Hello Beki, glad you bumped this up and I'm happy to do the same. I enjoy reading these, especially 008. There are so many poems posted each day it's tough to read them all, which I can't. Sorry I missed this the first time.

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

8 posted 2000-03-09 06:31 PM

Thanks everyone, for reading and for tolerating my selfish "bumping up" LOL
I have published over 3 dozen haiku in small press literary magazines but none for several years, am getting ready to send a bunch more out, perhaps even a collection. Thanks for the encouragement, Hoot!

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