Open Poetry #6 |
Such Sweet Sorrow |
Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Such Sweet Sorrow You're leaving, this home for good the time has come, I know you should for now you must play life's game nothing for me ever be the same The time with you I hold so tight sheltered and loved you thru the night time and you are now in the past memories of you to forever last Of the past desparately to hold to the future you charge so bold a freedom I long thought so fine I cherish years now left behind Trying to hold you in loving hands you slip away like drifting sands you now depart intent to leave but to return, I shall believe I will, I must not hold you back your presence now my world to lack not to be strangers this I know out the door to college you go I love you with all I have within greater than any that's ever been for my son you now leave this home on your own this world to roam < !signature--> [This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Danny, you've written this poignant poem straight from your heart, haven't you? It must be so difficult, and yet, something we must do, and "want" to do for our child, when the time comes for them to make their way. I'll be writing one like this of my own in about four more years...sigh... Hang in there... ~ Claire |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Very sincere and heartfelt, I can see you love your son alot. Maybe you should give this to him as he is leaving for college? Just a thought! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Danny, you write with such honest and gentle tender, emotions, very very nice!!!jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very tender and loving poem--I wrote one like this for each of my sons and they treasure them...as I do them. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Very nicely written Danny. I sure this will be something he will look back on in years to come and smile. Marina |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Danny~ Tugged at this mom's heartstrings. Recalling the tears I blubbered ... and the light that I kept burning in the window. After four of them ... you'd think it would have gotten easier .... NOPE ! Wonderful poem from a loving Dad. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Danny, This was a touching poem, my heart went to you in your fight to let your child go but wanting to keep him near...needing you. My own children are still young but each day I see them needing me less and less and each triumph for them is bittersweet for me. God bless you and the fathers like you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Awww....Danny, it's so hard to let them go isn't it? What a heartfelt poem |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Like you said Danny sweet sorrow This was a sad but sweet piece I could feel your longing to hold on but also your need to let go. LoL Tracie (don't worry if I know boys he'll be back whenever he needs his washing done). Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely love between a father and his son. I especially liked "I love you with all I have within..greater than any thats ever been." James |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
A brief note to all that have responded to my poem. Such sweet words each of you have responded with. Thank You. [This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Having no children, I can't even empathize with the feelings portrayed here. But I will say it's nice to have some insight on what it must have been like for my parents! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This is fabulous...I started reading it wondering where it was going....I could see several possibilites....but then you wrapped it all up so nicely at the end! Bravo! Last year I was with a man whose daughter was off to college, and I saw his pain....I can relate to this well. I think he felt he was losing his whole identity when she left...Wondering what to do from here...? Powerfully spoken and in beautiful form. Thanks for sharing. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Been here! Everytime they say good bye it's like a fresh stab in the heart! |
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