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Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2000-03-07 07:00 PM

Sighs of
Torment

Rain

drops
softly upon
my window sill

Tears

fall
silently upon
my aching heart

Wind

blows
noisily
swirling round
swaying trees

Sighs

whisper
desperately
within this
tormented soul

Run

from
me, leave
this breaking
heart

Alone

Let
Me be
Set me free...

Please

Dark Angel
2000

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-07-2000).]

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2000-03-07 08:07 PM

Are you ok, Maree? This is a poem filled with pain! It's very good, but I'm worried!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2000-03-07 09:46 PM

DarkAngel~
Wow!

This is hauntingly lovely.
Such depths of emotion.
The words alone would have been enough ...
but the formatting adds tremendously
to the overall 'feel' of it.

This one calls my name,
over and over again.
That doesn't happen often.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

3 posted 2000-03-07 09:56 PM

This is breath taking and so filled with pain and sorrow. I am so moved by the picture that you painted with your words. Your gift is amazing.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 2000-03-07 10:24 PM

Very well written and formatted, but oh so sad

((((((HUGS))))))

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2000-03-08 07:00 AM

Sharon, I am fine honey, thank you.

Sorry to worry you.

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Wow Marge, thank you, not sure If I'm deserving of such a lovely compliment. Glad you liked it, the format was experimental.
Thanks again.

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B_D_C, Thank you for your lovely reply, and your lovely copmliment, although I wouldn't say It's amazing hehe. thank.
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Ruth honey, thanks sweetie.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

6 posted 2000-03-08 09:59 AM

Haunting indeed. Tears torn from the soul of your pen. Well done.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2000-03-08 08:41 PM

Thank you for your lovely reply Christopher.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

8 posted 2000-03-08 09:16 PM

DA this is extrememly well done! So very sad it just rips your heart out! EXCELLENT work my friend!!!

<*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

9 posted 2000-03-08 10:53 PM

Excellent, DA! I could feel the anguish in this! Well done!

Denise

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 2000-03-10 01:24 AM

Rebecca Angel, thanks Sweetheart.

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Denise, thank you for your lovely reply.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

11 posted 2000-03-10 01:42 AM

Simply lovely.

The wisp of sadness is so palatable...wow...Maree, you have done very well.

Excellent layout too...and putting 'alone' by itself really shouts it out.

Hugs, K

'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

12 posted 2000-03-10 09:16 AM

Reading your work one can't help but feel the emotion, indeed you paint a vivid picture.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

13 posted 2000-03-10 09:28 AM

Wow. This was wonderful. An experimental form but it suits you. Well written my friend.

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