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What I Long For.....
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What I Long For..... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I have been reading your poetry and feeling your words. First of all I want to thank you for letting me read your works I feel blessed that there are people with talent such as yours that are willing to share their gift. Secondly I am an honest person and don't post comments that I do not feel in my heart and soul, I only ask that you do the same....a word with out meaning is like a heart without love....empty. I long for someone to walk with me, when the road is long. I search for someone to touch me, when I feel I don't belong. I reach for someone to warm me, when the night is cold. I seek for someone to hear me, when I have a story that needs to be told. I beg for someone to hold me, when the storms are brewing. I call for someone to teach me, when I don't know what I am doing. I yell for someone to come to me, when I can't find my way out. I grasp for someone to lift me, when I'm drowning in doubt. I crave for someone to tell me, that I'm who they dream about I want someone to love me when I do not love myself I want to love someone and to them belong. Before my life is done, I want to sing love's song. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ Honesty among friends is the only thing I know ... rest assured I'm as good as my word. 'I want someone to love me when I do not love myself' Such a simple request, beautifully said. You'll do a-okay in this circle of friends. WELCOME ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I think, that you captured my very essence in this poem, thank you. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sing with us Butterfly. . .let your voice join with ours as we seek a new world. . . This is a very beautiful piece. . . I think that it's what we all want. . . and you have captured it very well. . .simply wonderful.. . And welcome, my friend. . .welcome to the Passions Family. . . ----------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I want to thank you from the bottom of my heart for your "welcome" and I hope that my opening didn't offend anyone. I should explain, my poem spoke of the things that I'm searching for in my life because for the most part they are the things I've never had. I have had so many people in my life that spoke empty words that I often clung to and ended up as empty as the words themselves. It was more of a request that each of us speak the truth and become real rather than become as empty as the words we say when we are trying to be what others want us to be. When it comes to poetry I don't think that there is a more pure form of communication and I think that my statement was out of place here. I apologize to anyone I may have offended. Thank you. |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
First of all, let me say welcome to Passions. I have seen the sincerity of your replies and will let you know I sincerely think this was beautiful. I see no way your statement could have been offensive to anyone. It was simply asking for honesty in replies, something we all should be giving anyway. Your poem captures the essance of the longing for a love never experienced...something I can relate to well...LOL Anyway, it reminded very much of something I wrote quite a few years back. I hope you don't mind me sharing it with you here. It's call "Need". I need someone to care for me, Deepest desires share with me. I need someone to hold me tight, Shelter me from the cold of night. I need someone with kisses warm To softly guide me through the storm. I need someone gentle and mild, Carefree and innocent as a child. I need someone to laugh and smile, Strong as stone and yet fragile. I need someone tender and true To decorate my nights in shades of blue. I need someone who'll understand I need someone to hold my hand. Yet someone with a shadow not so long, They could never fully appreciate my song. Someone who's eyes I can stare into, Who's heart I could reach forever through. Someone who can see all the needs I dream of, And realize I only dream of their love. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Michael, Thank you for your words of praise and most of all for sharing your poem with me, my hands shook as I read it and felt as though I was looking into my own soul with your eyes. It was beautiful, and I'm grateful that you allowed me the pleasure of reading your poetry. |
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PREACH Junior Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 20 |
I really loved this piece, because there has been and will be many more times when I too have felt that I did not belong and wanted and needed someone and did not have anyone this poem is truely my feeling expressed thankyou for saying what i could not. PREACH 4 EVER |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Preach, You are most welcome and I offer you the peace of knowing that in our darkest moments we are never as alone as we think we are. Thank you for you words of kindness. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Butterflies_dont_cry, Welcome... to passions and what a wonderful poem to start with. I really can relate to this one. It reminds me of two I wrote recently, soft and heart felt. Your words are very sweet in their want. Do please post more. Parker.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Parker, Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read, I hope my other pieces don't disappoint you. |
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jazzgal Junior Member
since 2000-03-07
Posts 37 |
Your poem is very true to it's nature and it touches emotions in me that i can really relate to... you will go far with your geniune words. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Jazzgal, Thank you for your praises and I'm so glad you were touched by these words. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Every line of this was lovely. James |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
James, Thank you...your words of kindness do not fall upon deaf ears, I am so glad that you liked it. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Butterflies-dont-cry, Your poem was beautiful and I to have had many souls in my life, and I have begged for the same feelings from them as I gave, but for what ever reason they could not return the love. I know that Gods see's my heart and some day he will bless me with what I desire the most and that is as your poem says. Thank you so much, and WECOME TO PASSIONS Cerenity |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Welcome to passions the best place to be < !signature-->I totally agree with you. as for your poem it was so beatiful and I loved every word of it. Once again WELCOME LoL tracie  Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Cerenity and Tracie, I want to thank you from the bottom (and top..lol) of my heart for your "welcome" I truly feel at home here with others like yourselves who have been through the same trials as myself and feel that I am for once understood and accepted for who I am and not judged by the pain I hold within me. You are so kind. Thank you doesn't begin to say what I feel. But I think you know. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family. Please check your email! I don't think anyone would be offended at your request for honesty. And since your poem is heartwarming and lovely, you need not worry that anyone would not like it. I look forward to reading more of your work.  |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
A beautifull piece, it certainly stuck a cord with me and judging from the other replys with many others as well. Your words captured the feeling very well. Honesty and love is not too much to ask for..... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Poet and Eagle One, Your words are more than that they are a hand reaching out to welcome and accept me You can never fully realize what those feelings are like to me. Thank you so much for your sincere views. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your poem comes from the heart and that is clearly evident. I think you speak for many of us in your desires from a person. That is all of what a relationship should be. Welcome to passions |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Yes, the heart can sing and you have written the lyrics so well. Welcome to Passions. Your talent is a welcome addition to these halls of soulful expression. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Butterflies, This poem is one of the best I have read on this site. It is so intracate and truthful. It speaks volumes to me and I'm sure alot of people who post here. If it is any consolation to you, you will never be alone here at Passions. You will find all that you deserve...trust me. Thankyou for sharing this piece. I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Welcome indeed. Beautiful, and truly, what more could one ask? |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Hoot, Danny, Christopher and the much to kind...Mete (I'm still a lovely shade of red from your compliments...lol) Thank you for your "welcome" it means so much coming from a writers with as much talent as I have seen you write with. I am shocked that anyone even read my poems let alone liked them and no I'm not being coy...that's not who I am. We are our own hardest judge and never feel what we do is good enough so to hear your praise I feel very out of sorts and am working at writing replies without wondering if you are all reading a different poem that the one I wrote...lol From the bottom of my heart I thank each and everyone of you very Sincerely. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Butterflies~ Welcome...I will always be honest with you. This is wonderful..I'm glad you shared it with us.I've only been gone a few days, now I'll have to seek out more from you!  -SEA |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Butterflies... welcome to passions. My replies/comments are always what I truly feel deep within me. This is a beautiful and heartfelt piece and touched me deeply. Looking forward to reading more of your poetry. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
WELCOME! When I first saw the title of this, I thought it was my poem! I wrote something similuar to the longing! I can relate to this too! I think it's something many people yearn for, look for in life. I sure hope you find that someone to fill that loneliness!! I would like to post mine here for you too so you can see what I mean. What I Long For... I long for awesome sunsets Someone to share them with Romantic walks along the beach A passionate tender kiss I long for summer nights To lay beneath the moon Make love under twinklin stars Or in the park at noon I long for summer dances In a field filled high with wheat Or the coldness of a stream Where we could hang our feet Romantic dinners by candlelight A loving word from you A warm and steamy bath With bubbles filled for two © 1999 WhtDove See we both long for someone to share things with. I enjoyed your poem immensely! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a very beautiful, touching poem! Welcome to Passions! Denise |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Just me wandering around the archives again! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I eventually get to all the "first posts" and find that I am always glad I did.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
that's what I want too...thanks for sharing |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beautiful piece |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This still brings tears to my eyes! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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