Open Poetry #6 |
Sorrow Sleeps Quietly |
Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sorrow Sleeps QuietlySorrow sleeps quietly beneath these sheets It has taken its place here between The imprint, still warming, shadow's shape of my love And my own restless form fraught with dream 'Twas death's calling lullaby that stole him away 'Twas a voice of no tide or concern For a love that rebirthed my young heart every day 'Twas a song that no scholar could learn Though our kisses grew longer each time of depart His return I would always embrace Until then, with morning's fresh coffee and news I would gaze on my love's handsome face But a price tendered then for the love we had known Though we lived with the threat day to day His dedication to truth and to justice for all One sudden act flashed my love's light away. And nights like the last, as I reach out my hand And touch, tender, the place where he slept I cannot but wish that this lullaby's lace Could now dry the bitter tears I have wept. Claire |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sorrow sleeps quietly beneath these sheets It has taken its place here between The imprint, still warming, shadow's shape of my love And my own restless form fraught with dream ----------- And nights like the last, as I reach out my hand And touch, tender, the place where he slept I cannot but wish that this lullaby's lace Could now dry the bitter tears I have wept. Claire, this is tradgically beautiful... you write with such a grace and gift, even your pain is a beautiful expression...Im sorry for the loss this poem speaks of. take care, jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
will echo the post above in saying that yes you write with care and grace, and a soft beautiful love....sigh.....this gave me chills it is so loving and sad |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Claire, You sure know how to write with beauty something so sad........ Hugs! Parker [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-06-2000).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
MM... very tenderly tendered.... a beautiful expression of absense... no words to comfort my friend... there are none... peace |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, this is beautiful. Your poetry has a quality that is rare--and I don't have a name for it. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ah Claire, this leaves me speechless....as someone else said, how you write something so beautiful from something so painful amazes me... |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
(drying eyes) Wonderful Claire...just beautiful... Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I could feel the sorrow as my own as I read this Claire. I'm sorry for your loss. I knew living with that threat day to day as my father was a police officer. Seeing him come up the walkway was always an inexpressible relief. This is very well written, Claire. Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 03-06-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ My heart sighs for your loss. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, Very well done, excellent. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Janet Marie...thank you. I'm glad that you found beauty in this poem...there is beauty to be shared in most everything. Corazon...thank you for reading and letting me know how this made you feel. I appreciate your comment. Parker...thank you, my friend...hugs back to you. Local Rebel...no words are necessary, thank you so much for reading and for the peace. Martie...I thank you...for seeing beyond just the pain. poetFemme...thank you, as well, for reading and letting me know. Chris...it's alright. Thank you for reading. Sorry for the tears... Denise...thank you for your understanding. Yes, you must know, acutely, the threat of which I write. Marge...thank you for reading...I am alright, now, I promise. Seymour...thank you for reading and for letting me know. ~ Claire |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Painfully beautiful, Claire. Your talent is remarkable, as always. *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You have touched my heart, you are very talented thank you so much for sharing this gift with us. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Hauntingly beautiful |
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Toyy Junior Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 16Reno Nv. |
Very beautiful MM, you surely brought tears to my eyes. I have never dealt with that kind of loss but if I were to, I hope I could put my feelings to paper as beautiful as you!! God bless! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Krista ... beauty and pain come from the same heart, and so we write, you know? Thank you so much for reading and letting me know you enjoyed this. Butterflies...thank you for reading it...I'm so glad you were touched by something I wrote. *smiling* Hoot Owl...Thank you for reading this one...and for the smile Toyy...thank you for reading, and I bid you a warm welcome to Passions. ~ Claire |
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