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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-03-05 10:17 PM

A phantom shoal

On a night of household dreary,
Blessed and near a fires cheery,
I watched the moon of cold outdoor,
Dance shadows on my evenings floor.

Mixed with glowing red of embers,
Fixed my mind on old remembers.
From long ago in memories store.
Of things that were and are no more.

She visioned me in loving stare.
An apple face beyond compare.
With sparkling eyes and mouth of red,
She came to me pure fountainhead.

Tears ran down my cheeks, hot butter
Caused my heart to smart and flutter.
And warming me unto my core,
This blessed evenings fancied awe.

For I knew this shore a phantoms shoal.
A rueful muse, for a lonely soul.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2000-03-05 11:01 PM

Oh, Seymour~
To know your muse for
a fortnight would be Heaven to me.

'Mixed with glowing red of embers,
Fixed my mind on old remembers.
From long ago in memories store.
Of things that were and are no more.'

You are a poet with heart and it
shows with each rendering from your pen.
Love ya' ~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Martie

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California

2 posted 2000-03-05 11:12 PM

Oh, Sy...sweet memories muse...you write so true that my eyes sting.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 2000-03-06 02:10 AM

What else could I give this but a:
siiiiggggghhhhh...

K

'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2000-03-06 02:12 AM

I think I knw her too, Sy. Exquiste poem.

Michael

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2000-03-06 08:22 AM

Sy,
Your phantoms dance most anywhere
In ember light or whisp of air
We all have visions of the past
Only poet's page will make them last
Beautiful, beautiful poetry
Liz

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 2000-03-06 10:28 AM

My oh my, does this ever have a Poe feel to it (and considering that I think he's a master of rhythm, that is indeed a compliment my friend) What a rhythm with this piece, it sings itself and then some. Wonderful work

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2000-03-06 05:07 PM

Marge, Your comment was beautiful, thank you *L*

Martie, Enjoyed your comment, *L*

Severn, Thank you so much for the big sigh. *L*

Micheal, I think so, thanks for the beautiful comment. My Friend.

Elizabeth, Your off hand remarks
Are a fire with sparks.
Love Sy

Hoot, Poe is one of my favorites, I'm glad you recognized the style. *L*

Denise

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8 posted 2000-03-06 08:46 PM

Beautifully melancholy. I love this, Sy.

Denise

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2000-03-06 09:34 PM

Denise,
Thank you for the read and beautiful comment. *L

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