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~ Oh to feel the Passion ~
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ Oh to feel the Passion ~ Oh to feel the passion in the wind of sultry breeze basking in a brand new sun To my chest I draw my knees lay my head on them to rest as I close my eyes & sigh breathing deep the air of you & me and smiling to the sky... Oh to feel the passion in the wind of sultry breeze To be tossed upon the waves to be sailing on the seas... Lay my head upon the sand as I close my eyes & sigh breathing deep the air of yesterday my dreams go flitting by... Oh to feel the passion in the sultry breeze of you I have yet to kiss your smile I have yet to know it's true... Lay my head upon your whisper as I close my eyes to dream breathing deep - the scent of love All my faith, you do redeem. March 5, 2000 |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh, to read the passion you write.... this too is excellent, Femme....very good writing. |
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Loneheart Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 92Eastern US |
truly beautiful Loneheart |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetFemme~ Very, very sultry. I like the feel of it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I know just the place. . . Love this one Femme. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tony Di Bart Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 160Toronto, Canada |
Great read. Your passion rang loud and clear and I could hear the sound of that ocean. But most of all I like that you lay your head upon his whisper. Wow that one line made the whole poem form me. For me everythinfg else in the poem was there to take me to that line. Thanks for posting. Death makes angels of us all and gives us wings where we had shoulders smooth as raven claws Jim Morrison |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sigh...when you go girl, you go girl! Bravissimo Gen, another hit! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Thanks to everyone, and nice to meet you Tony! Thank you for the really nice reply! And to er..... Christopher - - I sense some of that sarcasm from you sir, that I truly miss!  You're the only guy I've ever known who can say something that makes me want to get in a *ring* with, and do a few of my kickboxing moves on!! ROFLMAO No mercy..... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Oh, that sultry breeze. Let those soft winds blow. Very nice pFF, I also liked "lay my head upon your whisper". Soooooooo nice! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
i can't quite put my finger on it, but this one really speaks to me. I feel the words and the atmosphere, very sensual and calming at the same time. Wonderful lines...every single one. |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
I like this one too!! In fact if I was to choose between this and the last one, this one would win (just). I think it's the knee and chest bit that swung it.  Craig Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
Okay, pFF... I'm of the female gender, so unlike the replies of Mr. Danny and the other masculine poets, my view on this writing are from a way different perspective... THANK GOODNESS, RIGHT? This was a great poem, enjoyed the repitition of the 'sultry breeze' thing, and the line that 'got me' was the one where you pull your knees into your chest and lay your head to rest... I SOOOOOO relate to this poem, and often find myself absorbing all of nature's passions...allowing for a clearer conscience and more tangible thoughts on that special person... Wow! You do have a way of writing exactly what so many of us have felt. Thanks!  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I think you had me with just the title Gen... Lay my head upon your whisper...this is purely beautiful!!!! But I'm sure you know that!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Toyy Junior Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 16Reno Nv. |
~ Oh to feel the Passion ~ And I do! This is very beautiful, you have written from my heart!! I am new here and read quite a few poems, all of which I have liked, but this is my favorite, your writing is lovely...thank you!! gil |
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