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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
RequestWhisper to me? he'd ask, before we'd part, as though I had a choice. As though I could not feel his heart resounding in his voice. As though I could not feel his thirst, the needful, longing rhythm. The cadence, cresting, of his soul, the swelling ache within him. As though I might forget the searching sorrow of his sighs. The strength of passion from his lips, the hunger dwelling deep in his eyes. And though my love is now a memory taken far before his years Each night, I honor his request murmuring whispers through my tears.  Claire |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Claire, this is great! Very passionate and delicate at the same time. Nice job! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is beautiful...flows soft as a whisper!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
melodious beauty....hum..dont know if that is a word or not..but it fits..hehe... really loved this poem..great job.. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Claire, this is so beautiful. He sounds like he was very special. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"The cadence cresting in his soul ..." Those words are luscious honey on the tongue. Your work is a delight to read, Claire, I'm always richly rewarded with each new offering from your tender pen. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Gentle words Lady, written there aloft Words so intense, so soft Line by line A sheer divine I can feel the missing sound Coming from the ground Very enchanting poem The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Meadowmuse you have a way with words...you fit them together so nicely and they spring forth so romantically. James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Fred...thank you for reading and taking time to offer such a nice response. devina...thank you so much. Whispering is my weakness.  Majestic...thanks, and I'm so glad you liked it. Eloise...so nice of you to say it is beautiful. And yes, he was so very special. Kess...thank you for such an eloquent review. The literary admiration is most definitely mutual. Helmut...and such an enchanting response from you. Thank you, so much, dear one. James...I thank you, sincerely, but I must confess, it is more often the words, themselves, having their way with me. Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Every time I decide on a favorite poem from you, you come up with another one to decide on. This is exquisite Liz |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
I wish I could be that romantic when I write. This is very beautiful. monique |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Another wonderful poem Miss Muse. Parker |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
This is stunning,so moving, I loved it |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Some poetry you read, some poetry you like, and some poetry you are privileged to experience. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Claire ... this is a true work of art ... each time I look ... I see something new that I like Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
This is a very beautiful poem, beautiful, but sad. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
This is so sad....but beautifully written... Lovely tribute... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Some poems can just make certain emotions flow through the reader. This is certainly one. Excellent work, Claire. |
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Tasi Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 38Canada |
Increadibly tender... thankyou for sharing Claire |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire- Barely a whisper yet resounding with love. What you do with your words and feelings is so lovely. Beautiful, Claire. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Whew. Another poem this e'en to meet my mood. I don't deny this is beautiful, but it also has an enduring painful sadness to go along with it. Whispers through tears, echo to me of unfulfilled dreams and "I wish's." Sigh, thank you for this one Claire...I think!  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thanks, everyone, for letting me know you enjoyed this piece. Someday, who knows? I may find myself able to write something uplifting, for a change. Thanks again Claire |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Claire~ you have such a gentle way of expressing such beautiful emotions with exquisite words. -SEA |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, SEA...you have the nicest way of telling me so. Thanks so much for reading...so glad you enjoyed this. Claire |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A sad love song, perhaps - But very beautifully sung, Claire... Nicely done...  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Nan, thank you...for reading and responding in such warm fashion. I'm glad you liked this little poem. Claire |
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