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Romance is in the Rain
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Romance is in the Rain |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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I shiver in remembrance, < !signature-->Of that special misty night- The many hours of holding, Very much to my delight. Heaven’s own love drops, To fall upon our skin, Creating such romance- No beginning and no end. There with you darlin, Was far beyond compare- Soaked from head to toe- All I could do was stare. Wrapping limbs around you, So pleasing to my eyes, Marveling at your warmth, ‘Twas pleasure not denied. We ended late that night, Kissing our good-byes, Promising to meet again, Beneath the rain filled skies. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (edited 02-09-2000).] |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Beautiful as always! Devina Forget the umbrella! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Oh Devina how romantic....I just love long walks in the rain. Don't know if is was cause mom said not to....or just the playing and getting wet with someone special  thanks for reminding me how special it can beThere are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
devina, I know its not raining yet, but here I am. You paint it so wonderfully just the way I remember it, last night in my dreams. Parker |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Oh, it has been my experience that the best time to do anything outside short of sunbathing is when it is raining! good job, devina, I enjoyed this I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
You have such a beautiful way of expressing yourself. This caresses my mind when I read it. Very nicely done! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Is there more to add? Let's get going into the rain of lovers hearts Such wet but beautiful poem, a true one Ps gotta run catch the rain The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Devina- This is just so refreshing ! Much like the spring rains on a day in May. It appears to me that you are writing with your heart .... I like it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like this Romance in the Rain devina. Especially "creating such romance, no beginning and no end. A lovely, lovely poem and now I am looking for the rain. James |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Devina....nicely done gal.....nice pic too.....I made love in the rain once....(then it turned to hail)....figures..... |
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Evad Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 12 |
Devina: I have always wanted to make love in the rain. This will now make me want to even more. Thank you for sharing this with me. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Devina, this is so romantic! Beautifully written. Making love in the rain is something everyone should try at least once  -SEA |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Beautiful written!!!!! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Paul- Glad to see you sweetie! First Knight- Maybe this is ONE time not to listen to our mothers, you cant get sick if there's someone to keep you warm!!  James- my dear...you flirt shamelessly!!!!! But you do it soooo good!!! Mistiman- you're so right!! Shelley- Thanks for the compliment!!! Helmut-We've gotten a little rain in California, but I'm waitin' for a downpour dear!!! he he Then we'll have some fun!! Marge- It's always from the heart m'dear, thanks for feeling it!!! James- Hope your rain comes soon!!! Lol@you Toe....you were probably just so GOOD that God had to stop you before you hurt yourself!!!!he he Evad- go for it...tis a wonderful experience!!! SEA- so right you are hun!!! vandana- thank you!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
devina, m'dear, you have penned the stuff of secret fantasies, here -- I enjoyed the poem and the images it brought with it ... I do, however, have one suggestion regarding phrasing: in the first line, you might consider replacing "shudder" with "shiver," as the former has negative connotations that do not mesh with the intent of this piece. For example, you might "shudder" in disgust, but you would "shiver" with delight. Just my two cents -- thank you for the read, it was very -- erm -- refreshing! --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You know Kess...now that I look at that you're right..thanks hun..just for you..it's changed!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Promises so sweet, promises to keep, promises kept only in my sleep. Well done Lady, your work never disappoints! Danny |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
My thanks Danny... the heart can speak many a words... if only there's someone to listen!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mmmm...Fog is very nice too! and sunshine, partly cloudy, daytime, nighttime... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
like this lots, have never done this, lol, but then I am not dead yet either *giggles* great poem |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
devina, I've been listening to the song of a fallen angel.  It paints of hearts turned lightly blue. and you whose wings are so unstable, I give a hug to help you through.  Parker |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful poem! Very romantic, just how I like them (And incidently, Skyfire's two cents are worth gold) Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Simplistic, fluid, dripping with romance...perfect! Claire |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
I love the last Stanza, pure romance,just lovely . |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is great, Devina! I've never tried it either.......er, does mudwrestling count?  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
serenity- I'm sure you're right!!! Corazon- try it woman...you'll LOVE the memories!! G*** James- Your hug is much appreciated love, what would I do without you???? Liz- thanks hun, I agree with you about Kess..I must of overlooked that before!!! Claire- that's the most colorful comment I've ever recieved...I thank you!!! fool- my thanks to you!!! Balladeer- lol@picturing you rollin in the mud!!!!!! I guess it counts if you..er...finish!!!!he he Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Love the romance of this poem. It does make me wish for rain so I can experiment. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Come visit us in California m'dear...we seem to be getting a light sprinkle or two at the moment!!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I'll just leave you with the big dopey grin this gave me!  |
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Alias Junior Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 30 |
Great Poem Devina! i love the rain |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
LOL@you Chris!!!!! Whose mind is, hmmm???hehe Thank you Alias..hope you're enjoying your stay at passions!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
devina, this is so absolutely beautiful! I loved every word of it! Did Jesus laugh? I think He did, 'cause He was once a little kid; and all of us were made with joy both sugar-spice girl and snake-snail boy! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
My thanks to you Mel...glad to see that you've been able to stay awhile longer...I miss you already!!!! (I'll give the guilt again later when you if you decide to go!!!) Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yep, some of them pastures can really be muddy Balladeer..... |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Yet anougher success, your writing truly is devine, devina, is this the metaphor behind your user name or is it infact your real name, who knows, all I know is that you realy are devine . |
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