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PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2000-03-02 01:17 PM

She chooses her words carefully now
Her life, discontent
Wondering where it all slipped away,
Where it all went
She fashions for herself a cage, gilded
And tells herself secret lies
Wrapping them around her to please the mind,
As long as it gets her by
She pretends the present is the past
For her present is a mess
At night she lays her down to sleep,
But her eyes look to the west
She imagines a better man for herself
The love with the lust
In hands that can never feel again,
The gold gathers dust
She waits for something, but can’t describe
Just a yearning within
And every time she speaks of happiness,
From her lips, shedding skin
She wishes she was somewhere other than
In her ornamental cage, gilded
Yet knows who captured and perched her there,
Her own actions built it
She wishes not to break the cage, but fly unfettered
And everyone listen as she sings
So as to lift her up into the wind to soar,
As a bird on the wing

(New one)

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 2000-03-02 01:20 PM

APPLAUDING!!!!
Absolutely amazing...this bird really likes this one

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-03-02 01:51 PM

And tells herself secret lies
Wrapping them around her to please the mind,
As long as it gets her by
She pretends the present is the past
For her present is a mess
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She waits for something, but can’t describe
Just a yearning within
And every time she speaks of happiness,
From her lips, shedding skin
She wishes she was somewhere other than
In her ornamental cage, gilded
Yet knows who captured and perched her there,
Her own actions built it"...

well, I related WAY WAY TOO much to this one...have you been peeking

this is excellent and I very much like the style of the "new ones"...I think, based on a previous conversation, I might guess where this one comes from...
still stalking you..jm

When you see through love's illusions, there lies the danger...
And your perfect lover just looks like a perfect fool
So you go running off in search of a perfect stranger
While the loneliness seems to spring from your life
Like a fountain from a pool.

Jackson Browne

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2000-03-02 02:09 PM

Wow, this is a tragic and beautiful poem.  Did you wirte this for me I wonder?
I related to this poem, to every line, it was almost haunting to read.  Your words makes this poem soar. Applause!
I definately look forward to more poetry by you.

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

4 posted 2000-03-02 02:32 PM

Thank you Hoot, Janet, Honeybee.
I think I struck a chord unwittingly...

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