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In a daze
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In a daze |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
How nice is it to be, All alone, out by the sea. The gentle crashing waves, Merge together in a daze. A lover lost is here tonight, Who bravely stood up to fight, The one thing that he loved; Besides me. How nice is it to be, All alone, out by the sea. How could you take him away? My mind’s in turmoil every day. I curl and shake and cry, All because you let him die. But yet for you I feel no hate, Because for him I was just too late. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
Wow. This poem is amazing....tragic yet so beautiful. The person that this poem is about must be very special to you....I am sorry that you feel so bad.I hope that by writing away some of your torment you can let go, bit by bit. My heart is with you.  I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
I wrote the poem after being reminded of a plot from a book I read a long time ago. I was trying to write from the main character's point of view. unfortunatly, it is too similar to certain situations present in my life. Thank you, your sympathy is graciously accepted. |
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infinat3 sadn3ss Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 85somerset england |
debs , who is this about ? . please tell me its no'one i know . im not making suggestions but please come to me to talk if you ever need to , ill always listen , however stupid or insignificant you may think it is . LOVE FOREVER mike ps , the bear looks like bobo (simpsons) pps , "although things in the present seem bleak , never forget to look to the future , you never know what it will bring (me) |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Great stuff, like cabe says, if you need to talk, shout my name, I will hear your call and 'answer quite slowly, the girl with calidoscope eyes' . Do you know that song because like diamonds, you and your poetry are precious, L.Of.L . Tom . P.s. That gives me a good idea for a poem, I'll write it tonight when I can't sleep . And show you tommorow when it's light again. With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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Thinker New Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 8 |
This is a great poem. It must have hurt to empathise so much with the plot that you describe. A wonderful poem none the less. To think is a right To know is to be too sure of your own exsistance |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Yes this is tragic, but I also think it has a feeling of....(I'm not sure if these are the right words here) peace and acceptance. I guess. I like this very much, thankyou for sharing this. Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
Thank you both! Thinker - It was a rather painful, because in ways the storyline was similar to my life at that moment. I suppose that made it easier to write. Eagle One - peace & acceptance, yes, it is a feeling that you can't change the past. Also, living with mistakes isn't always easy, but you've got to try. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***debs, ~~Also, living with mistakes isn't always easy, but you've got to try~~ it is a great comfort to me to hear you say this... keep on looking forward. love lou xxx I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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