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Through with You
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Through with You |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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MY dreams have all now faded- And I’ve come to realize… I must have been mistaken, When I looked into your eyes. The love I thought I saw in there Has proved to be untrue- It seems the only thing in life I cannot have is you. I have the open spaces Beneath the starry sky… I feel the longing stir in me Each time the wild geese fly. The urge to pack my saddle, Load up my truck and go… To land another ridin’ job- Or make some rodeo. To sit beside some mountain lake As sunlight lifts the dew- And strum some sad old melody And dream awhile of you. Those dreams I find far better.. In them you are a queen. Your voice so sweet and tender Your words are never mean. I guess those dreams of “might have been” For me will have to do. At least this way, you’ll never say- To me, “I’m through with you”. Visit My Home Page http://www.geocities.com/montcogunslinger/HomePage.html |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent poem Gunslinger. I like all the descriptive examples you give. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Great poem, and the last line ends it perfectly "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Nothing sader of tongue and pen, then what might have been. (not mine) Nice poem Gunslinger. Saddle in the pickup headed for the Rodeo. Sounds like a good plan. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very lovely poem gunslinger...hope for the best for you on the romantic side.. James |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Gunslinger, One of the hardest things to face in life is a lost love, but the strength of your poem portrays a need to ccarry on with your life. This is highly commendable.  Well done, a fantatic piece. I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
GS, the only way I'm relating right now is feeling the pain of these words. Those words...I'm through with you...are very hurtful. Another fantastic poem! |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
You took a bad situation and turned it into a great poem..lovely versus..lots of meaning! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful and sad  Denise |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Ditto the above comments. I love your work! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Gunslinger - this has a lovely flow to it - I enjoyed reading it  Roniece |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well written, as always, and full of romantic wanderings, that i love in your poetry Liz |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Awww...Gunslinger, this is simply beautiful. What a lovely heart you have...she'll see, you croonin' cowboy, you! "Hog-tie" her and read this to her! Superb work here once again. You've my admiration. |
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