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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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-lonely son- A lonely sun in an only sky. No one to sing a lullaby. Why do you even try? There are crumbs in the wine. Mistakes dull like alabaster. Faces hidden in the plaster. Are you really your own master Of what's pushing you to whatever faster? Outside, Santa Monica breeze Moving the fronds of palm trees. Salty gritty taste of pleas. Footprints form a nonsense frieze. Or are those really dug-in psalms? Your favorite note Of your favorite composer's Song? Play along. Drink along. Boy used to wonder about snow. Feel fine. Fall free. Now he wonders where the days go. Lonely sun tints only pane. Lonely son tips back his pain. Fingers grip the glassless rain. Drink it down; it's like cold flame. Tastes like water turning to tea. Was that a prayer or another plea? How does it feel to be so like the sea? Washing things away, colored dark, deeply. |
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dash rendor Junior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 21 |
I printed this poem up. As far a i can discern, this poem is very deep and has a nice level of emotion. However, i have trouble extracting all of the meaning from the poem. Its sounds very very well written, and it impresses me a lot. If you could post a little explaination or send me one via email i would greatly enjoy that. (my email is [email protected]) Thank you and very well done. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Excellently expressed...gives one the sense of futility. You've shared it well here. (...from one who can relate)  Claire |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
dash, Glad you enjoyed it. I won't tell you what it means, because one of the beauties of poetry (and all art) is that it can mean so many different things to different people. Who's to say the creator's view is the right one? Thanks for your compliments of my writing. Claire, We all understand futility, sometimes. Hope things are going well for you. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
you are soo right...people usually get different meanings from my poems as well...this was a very well written piece of emotion here hun...I enjoyed every minute!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
very nicely written...it kinda grabs hold of ya and takes ya along on the ride...great job. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
ok, I understand most lines, but not sure about the whole meaning, I too am gonna save this one and go over it again later... oh and BTW I liked it...lol....if i failed to make that clear above... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
devina, Majestic and Corazon: Thanks! Mike |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I quite enjoyed this! Did Jesus laugh? I think He did, 'cause He was once a little kid; and all of us were made with joy both sugar-spice girl and snake-snail boy! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks. It's been so long -- god, ah remember writin' this while listenin' to BUSH. *shudder*  She said burn ... together. |
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