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Not Even A Footnote
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Not Even A Footnote |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Concealed, he reads the pages of my life Between the lines discerns himself within Believes my inkwell deep with him is rife Where did such arrogance as this begin? He slithers close at times to let me know He’s ever lurking near with watchful eye And hisses with disdain he’ll not let go Until from me he’s wrought a tortured cry. A powerhouse is used of energy To tell me I’m not worth a single watt Intelligent, I make no claim to be But seems more ‘smarts’ than that I’ve surely got. Of many volumes penned before life’s done A footnote he’ll not claim, not even one. < !signature--> Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-13-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow!...What a poem. Certainly, though, there are much better things to be writing about, especially in his case. Very well done, Denise. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 01-12-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You tell 'em, girl!!!!!!!!!!! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Don’t bring out the ring to spar As things are settle here with words in war You told him how you feel The punches thrown feel so real Well done there dear And I agree with Balladeer |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
score one for denise...hehe |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Um have no idea what I walked into on this one... but I don't think there is any doubt about the feeling of the author... well expressed d!  |
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Denise
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No battles are going on.....just some thoughts on someone from the past. I guess just my way of saying that even though he thought(thinks) that the sun rises and sets at his command...he is nothing in my life! Thanks for reading and commenting! It is always appreciated!  < !signature-->Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-12-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise. I just had to check to make sure you were OK before responding to this. My, how your creative juices are flowing! Quite the poet, who can embellish a story like this. How about a novel? Liz |
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Denise
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Thanks for your concern Elizabeth! But I'm just fine! Sometimes I get a spurt of creativity, fictionally speaking, but I think novels are beyond my capabilities. I'd best leave that to Marilyn! Thanks again, Elizabeth and for reading and commenting too! Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've echoed many men in my past...probably why they are in the past right??? Smiles for you on this one Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Kevin Taylor Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 185near Vancouver, BC, Canada |
Upon his tombstone if he gets one... "not worth a single watt" Old Whatshisname. Good one ds |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tee hee ! Just perfect, Denise. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is potent verse, Denise. Excellent in rhythm and form. Has such an underlying (and overlying!) darkness woven into it.  Claire |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Devina- yep, that's why they are in the ,past,yep! Thanks for reading and commenting! Kevin- actually, that is my favorite line and the line that spawned this poem! Glad you liked it too! Thanks for reading and commenting! Marge- glad you found the humor in it! I had a chuckle when writing it too! Thanks for reading and commenting! Claire- there is that element, isn't there?! Thanks for reading and commenting! Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Powerful emotions here that I sure can feel....!! As Marge says Denise....perfect!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
YOU GO GIRL!!! |
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Denise
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Thanks Pepper and Caroline, glad you liked it! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
What an incredible poem, Denise. I loved it! Nathan |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise, don't give that.....another thought and no more writing about him, you here. You never know who might be hiding between the lines. Seriously, great poem and well written. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Denise, Nothing like a sonnet and you've penned a good one. Love your couplet. Good one! Rus |
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Roger Leewright Junior Member
since 1999-09-25
Posts 28Beaverton, OR.USA |
Denise, I always find something new from you. I don't check inas often as I should I see. Hope he gets watt he deserves!!! Hee Hee |
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Rus Bowden Member
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Denise
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Thank you, Nate, Martie, Rus and Roger for reading and commenting! Glad you all liked it! I don't usually write 'dark' poetry and didn't know how this would go over. Wow, Rus, that's beautiful! Thanks so much! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
That's giving someone the boot... with emphasis! *G* Well done! |
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Denise
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I like that, Suthern...giving someone the boot...with emphasis!!! Yep, I guess it is!!! Thanks for reading and commenting! It is always appreciated!! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Way to go Denise! Keep boot'n em! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
ssssssssssss SMOKIN' Way to tell it! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Excellent poem!! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well I ain't good with "footnotes" But I'll add a "Toe-quote" Ya done good, like we knew ya would, And your footnote jerk should also! You are such a sweetheart, The folks here all do know, You're work is always a great start, To ev'ry morning you add glow! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I thought I commented on this, Denise... It's really good, and I'd seriously consider giving him a bootnote...... |
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Denise
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Thank you, Rebecca, Echo, Septsong, Toerag and Nan for reading and commenting! I appreciate it! And thanks for the sweet poem, Toe! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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stephen j Junior Member
since 2000-01-15
Posts 21 |
GREAT POEM!!!!!!AND I MEAN THAT |
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Denise
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Thanks Stephen! I'm glad you liked it!! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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