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Parker
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0 posted 2000-01-12 03:45 PM

Promises and Paper Chains
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Paper kept in dusty places
In cupboard drawers, on bedroom walls
Promises made on paper chains,

the ink long dried
of a ceremony gone by,
a reminder, of vows taken,

I Read the scroll, and see her face
a solemn promise is shaken
the paper brittle, the ink is fading,

how to break these paper chains
of promises made in another time
our simple lives, now so complex.

                  Parker. Dec 29, 1989

[This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 01-12-2000).]

Sunshine

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1 posted 2000-01-12 04:14 PM

...and they weigh so heavily at times...

Well done, Sir!

Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30

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2 posted 2000-01-12 05:03 PM

BRAVO!!!! Very well written!
"paper chains of promises made in another time" really love that part.

Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho

Nate Dogg
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3 posted 2000-01-12 05:03 PM

Few words but great meaning. Nice poem.

Nathan

Corinne
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4 posted 2000-01-12 05:24 PM

Life can very sad and emotional at times, can't it?

And these reminders, like your chains, are sometimes the hardest to deal with, do we throw them away to keep the memories at bay, or keep them because we know that someday we'll be glad we did.

Nice poem!

Corinne

poetFemmeFatale
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5 posted 2000-01-12 06:34 PM

Beautiful read sir! Aaahhh....I sense some sadness, and yet so much heartfelt romance in this too! What a moving piece....Very well said.

PS....I am clawing the screen!!! ROFLMAO

** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

devina
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6 posted 2000-01-12 06:53 PM

Beautifully well done dear, I'm curious as to what has brought upon the sadness in this one, but tis lovely all the same.

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Denise

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7 posted 2000-01-12 07:58 PM

Promises can be broken so easily, can't they. Very sad. Well done poem, James.

Denise

Michael

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8 posted 2000-01-12 08:33 PM

The emptiness of this piece just flows. Beautiful...but sad. Very enjoyable reading.

Michael

hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 2000-01-12 09:39 PM

Bravo!!! What an excellent written poem and an imaginative idea

Parker
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10 posted 2000-01-13 04:28 PM

Thanks Sunshine ... your right they do.

WildChild thanks, glad you liked the line.

Thanks Nate, I think I'm not a very good long form poet, as short and sweet as possible.

Ah sweet Corinne, I think keep the reminders, your right we may regret their loss, everything we've ever done and been is a thread of who we are, good or bad. ... thanks.

Parker
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11 posted 2000-01-13 04:49 PM

poetFemmeFatale, It was a sad moment for something that played a wonderfull part in my life. ....

P.S. I got my supply of popcorn waiting for that big meeting.

devina, thanks. Sometimes a relationship ending is like death, no more communication, no more warmth of friendship, no more long talks on the phone, is there really any difference.

Thanks denise , Micheal, and Hoot, I'm so glad you guys liked it

Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 2000-01-13 05:01 PM

What a lovely poem! Two thumbs up!
Liz

Parker
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13 posted 2000-01-13 05:43 PM

Elizabeth, thanks I'm glad you liked it, I think thats my first two thumbs up... cool.

passing shadows
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14 posted 2005-04-16 05:11 PM

very good write
love the feeling it gives

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