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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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This was not an easy poem to write. Since I'm never going to show it to the person it's meant for, I thought I'd just put it up here, and let the words speak for themselves. Life can be so complicated sometimes. Yet, thankfully with the right perspective, still joyful and still a miracle. Mike -rubber duck bridge- What you never told me Burns inside of me. That movie we watched on a wintry New Hampshire night, What the blocks spelled out in the cast members' hands. I never would have guessed the insect's identity. I understand why you let me go. The past is a rubber duck bridge, Lots of squeaky toys, Depressed, left to halffloat in water. You, triumphantly, realistically, Made it through the deep. Yes, you got wet. But you dried yourself off With understanding passion. And it's not a victim's sympathy I give you. I don't think of you as someone ugly, Someone so awkward and terrible and a monster. That was never what I felt. I think of you as the strongest woman I've ever met. Sometimes, in anger, I try to forget. And I know you're uncomfortable with what I've said. Even a mother's angry tears can't drown out the truth. You watch, you're going to make a mark all yours, As beautiful and crushingly delicate as a rose, Stem held by a child-like adult, Not an adult-like child. Long after the rubber ducks have floated away, Eyes sunken, beaks smile-frozen, color drained, I will still think of you with joy in my mind. I won't intrude on you, even if it means being left behind. If you still want my friendship, I'll be there at your side. (but even from afar, I will take joy in your flight: the toybox bathtub girl has made it -- and oh what a height!) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Mike - These are great sentiments... and very unselfish of you - Perhaps you should show them to her.....  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Mike, think she really needs to see this one |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Mike ,This is so unselfish, you should show her this, she needs to see it |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Wonderfully done...these feelings are special, and yes, unselfish. You have a big heart. I hope she knows what a special friend she has. It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
If it weren't for the first stanza, I would show the poem to her. It's a veiled reference to a movie we saw together -- one with such strange connotations it told me more about her than the movie, and more, than I think, she wanted me to know. That, compounded with lots and lots of hints and observations of her and her family, made me come to a painful conclusion about her past -- one I can't share. It's very personal and hurtful, and, moreover, none of my business. I wrote this poem to get that out of my head. The only hint I can give is the movie we saw, at her request, was Angels and Insects. Very obscure, I'm sure. That's it. |
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Anne Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 78 |
WOW!!! What an unforgetable poem. There are so many lines that struck sparks with me--how beautifully tragic and yet hopeful! Keep up the wonderful work! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep pretty incredible poem, it is nice to come to a spot that you can see them for who they are and wish them well...good poem mike |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks. This one is very personal and sad and ah kinda wish th' events in i' never happened. Ah well .... such is life sometahms... She said burn ... together. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a man you are! I admire that. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
*sigh* |
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