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Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes [Challenge from DreamEvil]
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Sunshine
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Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes [Challenge from DreamEvil] Not so very long ago during a midnight it chanced to snow and early, around 3:00 a.m. or so, I awoke to a glistening glow. There was no sound, no apparent life, but only in a fairy tale-like dream, could I imagine souls like crystal snowflakes come upon my scene. For there was a sparkle all around as the skies had cleared and the moon abound forth, over the land covered white, my crystal snowflake souls and I, alone in the night. For each flake was an individual spirit before it joined its companions white and like my world, they all joined in unity, to make things appear so right. So may souls like crystal snowflakes abound round you this year; and keep in mind during summer; that in rainbows they will appear. ©KRJ 11 January 2000 Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
A lovely scene of tranquility, Sunshine. Beautiful.  --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
What a lovely piece of writing, Sunshine! I especially enjoyed the last line of your first stanza, partly because I respond strongly to the alliteration, but also because of the sheer simplicity of your phrasing. Loved how, within your poem, the snowflakes each were souls, and were transformed in summer to rainbows...such an imaginative concept!  Claire |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Thanks Sunshine! I love snowflakes. EARTHMAN |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Skyfyre, Meadowmuse, Paul - the thanks go to DreamEvil for his lovely challenge. MM, I sincerely appreciate the depth into which you looked into this piece, and your words of praise. Thank you. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A rainbow only appears with sunshine, Beautiful poem Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You have out done yourself. You have a true epopee here. Bravo. and *L* Sy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth, Sy, there are a few poets within Passions that I truly aspire to reach - so I thank you for reading, and your kind words. I will continue to write to please you. Thank you. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sunshine...I don't believe you and snow could exist at the same time, you're so bright you'd melt every last bit. Lovely poem |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a lovely compliment, Hoot - thank you - but haven't you seen the Sun do wonders to a snowcapped landscape? Engulfs the imagination... Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Oh so lovely, Sunshine! Your creativity is marvelous I agree with Meadow...turning the snowflakes to rainbows was wonderful!It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Caroline. At first I didn't think that line belonged, but now I see that it does. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This left me in a dream-like trance...So very lovely Sunshine! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thanks, Pepper, but the credit must go to DE for his challenge... Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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