Open Poetry #5 |
Self Portrait |
Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Self PortraitBare and alone now she talks into the night The silent chill answers she clutches it tightly Speaking gently, she murmurs Her parched lips, once luscious Rounding syllables softly while wielding her brushes The hauntings have ruptured her once flawless face binding her bloody to this sorrowful place Canvas windows illumine her only true light from the oils and pastels seeking shape through the night Casting sadness and shade from a colorless palette stroking scenes of soiled centuries dripping thickly about it She paints through the darkness Hope's fallen frail poet No eyes for her pageant And to no one she'll show it Then long after the chiming of Dusk's towers ring She'll sleep, a pallid slumber, and to Death's masterpiece, cling Claire |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
I hardly know what to say. How sad and scarey. Is there any way I can help? Prayer to God always works for me. May I say one for you? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is exquisite, Claire. So well done. You have my prayers as well. Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This is deep and chilling, haunting. Exceptional piece. Michael |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I echo Michael, Exceptional.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wow ! Claire, this is powerful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bbuzz, Denise... thank you for your sweetness and concern, though this piece is not an appeal for help...just the halfhearted meanderings of a sometimes saddened pen. Michael, Mike, Marge...thank you for reading and taking time to respond...so glad you enjoyed this. Claire |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW!! this is indeed very chilling and very powerful!! enjoyed the read, Well Done!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Dreamer_556 Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 34 |
That is amazing! Truely chilling... ~*Dreamer*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Dark Angel and Dreamer...thank you both for taking time to read and reply. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. I will take "chilling" as a compliment here...thanks. Claire |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
M-Muse - I find your use of imagery quite exceptional, and the theme one of sad reality... The poem overall is a wonderful read.... |
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~ViXeN~ Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 93Guelph, Ont. Canada |
wow! this poem is good but just like a scarey story! i hope this isnt reality! shannon |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"Casting sadness and shade from a colorless palette stroking scenes of soiled centuries dripping thickly about it " Eloquent words, Claire -- a heartbreakingly beautiful poem. Thank you. --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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