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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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A prostitute, I turned from you. You were harsh and rude and street wise. One day I took the time to look and saw a child in your eyes. The baby dolls you never owned. The evil parents bent on pain. So young to be here all alone. nothing to lose, so much to gain. I reached a gentle hand to you. I promised you could come along. You clung to me and let me lead. I tried to teach you to be strong. Showed you a life you’d never led. I took you where you’d never been. Now three years later it’s so sad that you are on the street again. Your strung out on that evil crack And you’ve gone back to what you know. I offered you all that I could when you had no where left to go. Twenty years old and on the street I told you there was so much more. Now you are faced with evil truths That you weren’t caused to face before. I promised I would stand by you, That I would be your one true friend. The drugs caused you to walk away, but not what took you in the end. How do I say goodbye to you? The little girl I couldn’t save. I’ll just have to pray you see This rose I place upon your grave. I'll miss you always Crystal Lynn It's sad that you will never know. That in this world you had a friend I'll never let your memory go. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a powerful, sad piece. Very well written. I can feel the pain in your words, Lucie. Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucie - This is heartbreaking ... and hauntingly lovely. Hard to understand ... when you do all you can ... and it isn't enough. Bless you. ~*Marge*~ |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Sometimes love just isn't enough. But this heart can never stop trying. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Lucie, this is sad, I can feel your emotion its often hard to understand why all our efforts are sometimes not enough |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sniff, wiping tears! Wow does the hurt ever come through this! Excellent job and very sad! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lucie...this is heart wrenching  |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thank you all for your replies.. it is difficult to accept that I could not save her. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Lucie: This is beautiful and heartbreaking. I know you'll never stop grieving or wishing she'd made a better choice, but that won't stop you from trying to help someone else. And I'm glad of that, though I pray your heart isn't broken again. *S* At least she HAD a choice... before you, she didn't. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Knowing this was written from your own experience makes this piece all the more heartrending. Such a tender glimpse into a sad story. Thanks for sharing here.  Claire |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Lucie: Bless you both HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Deeply moving and powerful. Exellent work. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Lucie: I have no doubt from your words here that you tried your best, but it was not for you to save her... it was she who had to make that happen. Some people just don't have the strength to make it through, no matter how much love and support they are offered. Your poem speaks volumes for what you did and I hope that spark of humanity within you always burns bright for those whom have lost their way. My best to you and yours. Andrew [This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 01-12-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh dear Lucie....now I know why you haven't been back in full swing yet....I am so sorry. You did all you could do, as Andrew said. The rest was up to her, and she just wasn't strong enough. I am proud of you for trying. Keep you chin up....you must be going through a rough time with this. It's terrible...such a waste of a young precious life. You are in my thoughts babe. You know I'm here if you need to talk....Drop me an email or look for me on ICQ.....Love, Gen BTW, this poem was a beautiful tribute for her.... |
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