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'Home' |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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Home Homely held without walls I live only in an invention of image: chairs that know my arms as they rest a fridge squeaking welcome pots that clatter familiarity instead I search unowning flicking through lifeless print circling with a pen hoping for people quiet I stumble on unknown paths pat unknown cats and move into weighted rooms of other-breath still dancing with the dust motes Homeless at the core just handing over money for the right to plump comfortably on a couch another bought long before I scuff the carpet and I cry wanting just to melt into the sameness of a place called ‘home’ for longer than a year I am not of this nature to adventure the way of packing and tearing tape I want to settle like motes raised only under the stir of my breath within halls I mould and claim 11.01.2000 |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
You have quite a imagination Severn, I loved the poem too! Nathan |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I hope you find 'home' real soon, Severn. Well done, once again! Your longing comes through loud and clear in this! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, An unuasual read, but I enjoyed it *L* Sy |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Awesome Severn......You know there is one thing I hate more the moving......It is moving someone else  Home is where you heart lies....Not the place where your body does Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Don't ask me why..picking one of your poems as my favorite is a labor of Hercules...but this is it. Perhaps because the longing and wanting of it strikes such a deep chord in me, perhaps because the sadness is so real, perhaps because your pots clatter familiarity or you pet unknown cats....whatever it is, this one will stay with me for a long time. Thank you, Kamla. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Severn, I must say... This is, without a doubt, the best poem I've read in this forum! Bar None, hon! If you haven't already submitted this to publishers, you might want to consider it! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla, Kamla, I don't know how to express the feelings this poem gave me--so pure and elegantly simple that I knew exactly what you meant but could never have expressed it thus. You have such a talent! In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Severn - What can I possibly say that has not already been said? Your writing pallete paints masterpieces; your words evoking feelings like none other. Excellent May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Kid Pedestal Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 26Chandler, Arizona |
I love the way this is written. It takes me into new steps of thought when I think about my writing. Very nice. Kid Pedestal |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Severn I echo all of the above, I hope you find home soon *hugs* my friend.What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kammie - Home is in your heart. It's where you take it ... where you make it. What a lovely, haunting way you've described the search. Soon, little one .... soon it will be just the perfect place to be. ~*Marge*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dear Kamla, Your poem touched me very deeply because I know it's real. I can feel your hollowness and longing when I read this. As far as the poem itself, absolutely superb. (But dn't forget, you do have a home in Pennsylvania, you know.) Keep your wonderful spirit, Love ya, Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Kamla...even though I never know what the subject matter is going to be when I open up one of your works, I do know one thing...it's going to be great and it's going to blow me away, your words always do. This is so moving, so sad, but oh so well written! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
This is certainly one of the most heartfelt poems I've read. You can feel the longing and sadness here. Excellent writing! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Elegantly said. I felt this way after my divorce...someday, you'll have a place to call your own! Believe it!  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Kamla, you work never ceases to amaze me. This is awesome, and I relate so well to the theme. I've never truly felt at home where I am....I long for that feeling. To have it settle in... Very touching pice. Kudos Michael |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I have to agree Severn...your work never ceases to amaze and enchant me...a poetess first class! This piece is exceptional and speaks to me in a most personal way....I have finally found my 'home' and hope the same for you soon..... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
Yes!!! Been there, felt that. |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
Kamla every time i find a new favourite of yours you go and write another!!! I totally agree with Balladeer, and actually everyone else - the longing and sadness is evoked through your words, the way you place them, the sense of the poem is alive with a deep hollowness that extends deeper than your feeling of homelessness. Know that even when you are in borrowed space the space in your heart is a home not only for your poetry and everything else special that it contains, but it is a home where Christ settles and lives in forever - sweetie you'll find a place real soon, I know it. Loved this poem beyond words hon. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Very nice account I know all to well how it feels Moving from Germany to Canada Talking about Roots here. Good expression in your poem Thanks The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
Severn, this was amazing. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this rootlessness, me included. I think i've moved about 18-20 times in my lifetime, and skipped countries once, so i totally understand your perspective. Beautifully expressed. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Kam, we are kindred spirits in this...you've written a superb, absolutely perfect description of how it feels when home is not home. I hope someday we both know the comfort of knowing that where we are is where we always wanted to be. (((hugs))) It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is truly a wonderful poem, Kamla.... and never forget that there is a true home within your own heart.... They can't take that from ya... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Nice job...interesting fersure! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This was quite moving - someday you must tell me what you drew on to write so convincingly... Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow - thankyou everyone for your amazingly kind response to this, you are my friends one and all. Nate - thankyou - though there is little imagination involved in this one. Denise - thankyou!! I hope so too. Sy - my friend - thanks - I do so like to be diverse!! FKnight - that is a lovely sentiment and I appreciate it - it is just that I cannot fully embrace that... ThankyouDear 'deer - Kind Sir - you are so welcome, but I thankYOU for your understanding and for liking this so much - that means a lot. I do have that longing for a 'real' home - but being here with you guys would definitely in part answer FKnight's suggestion - where my heart is. Corinne - this compliment has totally overwhelmed me - thankyou very much, though I feel undeserving. ~Bowing~ Martie my friend - you know you always make me feel very loved and help me to believe in myself - thankyou. ~Hugs~ Satiate - such high praise has me blushing again. Thankyou! KP - Wow! Thanks! Oh - and welcome to Passions. Darling Dark - Thankyou!!! Affirmations! Marge(y) - you are a comfort to me, you really are. Thankyou. Lizzy - Thankyou!! To have another second home with you is such a blessing, I feel so loved - and I know you mean it - let's just hope I can get to the US, yes?! Ruth - thankyou my friend - your faith in me is a real gift. Sally - thanks - that is really nice. PdV - with such encouragement how could I not? Thankyou. Michael - Wow! thankyou!  I KNOW you will have that feeling soon - I just know it.Thankyou Shannon - dear reader. That you choose to read my work is such encouragement to me - and I am glad you have your home. Ted - empathy is a true comfort! Mirjam - you are one of the dearest friends I have ever had - thankyou, shining angel. Helmut - wow - that is a big move indeed. On that scale I cannot imagine - I just have little moves, little and too often. Thanks! Patch - Yes - it is hard - I'm 24, I've moved 42 times - in the process of moving again, right now. Thankyou. (Smile of shared empathy!)Caro - you are indeed a poetic Kindred Spirit - and in this as well. I hope you get your heart's desire also, my friend. Nan - words I will treasure (just wish I could lay down and sleep there!!!) Thankyou! Why Toe - thankyou... Sunshine - just my life experience and the feelings contained within. Thankyou so much. K |
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