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devina
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0 posted 2000-01-09 12:38 PM



On this night,
I kiss you
as the moon.

You light up,
brighter than
the fragile sky.

I caress you,
with the tune
of love.

I bathe you,
with the sight
of my eyes.

We join,
like an explosion
of the mind.

I giggle aloud,
with the backdrop
of stars.

We are one,
beneath
the moon-kissed sky.
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 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


[This message has been edited by devina (edited 01-09-2000).]

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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 2000-01-09 01:20 AM


Oohhh...this is innocently beautiful devina!  I love the moon, so it means an extra bit more to me!     I can feel your excitement as you giggle in this!  Aaahhh....to kiss under the moon....you did well with this concept!  Bravissimo!  PS...You are SO funny in Adult!  LOL  You keep ME laughing!  HAHA

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

Jer
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2 posted 2000-01-09 01:36 AM


Great poem.  I too love the way you added the moon into your poem.  I like to see things carfuly interwoven into peoples works. I get the idea that the kiss must have been great! Good work.
devina
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3 posted 2000-01-09 02:59 AM


Thank you Femme dear, glad to know I'm making you pee your pants in adult- you had me go'en tonight!!!!! Yes, this is an innocent one isn't it? hmmmm... Sometimes I surprise myself!!   
Jer- the kiss WAS great, just a long while ago   Of course the moon is out every night so...hmmmm. I'll have to work on it...Seriously though, thank you for your comment!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

whiskey
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4 posted 2000-01-09 03:08 AM


This is sweet   Well written I too like the moon its a beautiful thing
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 2000-01-09 09:07 AM


I'm with PFF...I like the sweet innocence of this one  
Tara Simms
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6 posted 2000-01-09 10:56 AM


This is refreshing.  I love "we join, like an explosion of the mind".  Awesome imagery.

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Quiet Lightning
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7 posted 2000-01-09 12:26 PM


this was a cool poem.Good luck to you and your loved one
Denise
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8 posted 2000-01-09 08:41 PM


Kisses can be like that sometimes!  Enjoy them when they are!

 Denise


far and away
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9 posted 2000-01-09 10:11 PM


Wonderful poem and very good imagery!!!  I enjoy this one!!
First__Knight
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10 posted 2000-01-09 11:33 PM


Has the feel of a child with the love of truth.....Like inoccent love.  Very nice

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



Parker
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11 posted 2000-01-10 12:23 PM


devina, I wish my usage of the moon could be so passionett... aaah if I could be that moon.

James (Parker)

Mike
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12 posted 2000-01-10 02:57 PM


Enjoyed the poem...  just goes to show you don't have to be verbose to say something wonderfully.
Michael
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13 posted 2000-01-10 03:01 PM


I love this soft, sweet verse, devina.  
"I bathe you,
with the sight
of my eyes."

...great line.

Michael

devina
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Cali
14 posted 2000-01-10 03:10 PM


I want to thank you all for the kind words!!!See Femme- innocence has it's advantages!!!LOL This one was just my stab at simplicity...

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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