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Martie
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0 posted 2000-01-07 09:44 PM


I yearn to Whisper Yes


I yearn to whisper yes to you
under a tree somewhere in the old south
under a willow tree perhaps
who’s tears drift slowly cleanly
layering my hair in green
and you with scarlet eyes sunset lit
would sing to me
a deep and true melody
a sigh that lingers against the hair
touch of tribute to the curve that bares
the loving night
a harp would be in cicada concert
with my breathe
and stars would peek
and moonlight linger soft
against the alabaster thigh
of forever
for I yearn for you
to close you into my warmth
to whisper yes
somewhere under a tree
in the old south



 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-07 09:47 PM


Oh, Martie, I think you've outdone yourself this time! Wonderful!

 Denise


devina
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2 posted 2000-01-07 09:49 PM


With scarlet eyes, sunset lit,
This is a beautiful poem, that line was my favorite!  


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Grandma Jo
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3 posted 2000-01-07 09:53 PM


You certainly touch the romantic in a persons heart, I loved it!  
Balladeer
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4 posted 2000-01-07 10:26 PM


Except for wonderful words, good thoughts and excellent imagery, this ain't so much!  

Another wonderful work, Martie.

HelmutB
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5 posted 2000-01-07 10:47 PM


"Gone with the Wind" comes to mind. Nicely written...set's the mood willing to unwind. Romance, Oh how I love the sound here in the air. With southern comfort and it's flair.
  


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Tara Simms
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6 posted 2000-01-07 11:10 PM


Beautiful, Martie.  Sounds like Charleston to me!  "and stars would peek and moonlight linger soft against the alabaster thigh
of forever".  Beautiful, I loved that!


 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2000-01-08 06:46 AM


Martie,
This makes me want to head south and find the nearest willow tree~ Martie, this is so romantic. Must have come from a romantic heart and the pen of an exceptional poet.
Fantastic!
Liz

Martie
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8 posted 2000-01-08 10:31 AM


I have never been to the south but it seemed the place to stage this romantic interlude.  Someday I will travel there and....well maybe....

Thank you all for your wonderful comments!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-01-08 10:42 AM


Martie, for not having been to the South, you've certainly captured the feeling of a romantic Southern night, from the cicadas to the sunset. The physical and emotional allure this lovely piece implies tugs at the reader's mind. Liked it very much!

Dear LadyClaire



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