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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
When cupid shot his arrow It must have missed your heart. For it seems you never cared Right from the very start. As I observed the scenes That played out in my mind. I realized those dreams Were never mine to find. The long awaited sadness Pierced my heart at last. You're no longer here anymore. You are now part of my past. As I turned and walked away A tear fell from my eye. But I didn't want you to see That you had made me cry. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Simple, but this packs a powerful punch. Sad and beautiful work, Eloise. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad. Been there, done that! And I agree...never let them see you cry!  Denise |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
Nice poem, explains the way I've felt all to often perfectly. But he saw me cry though I tried to hide it. Deborah |
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CrazyChick Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132 |
very well written  ) |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Thank you Krista. Denise, I guess it's an experience along the road from which we learn from. Deborah, thanks. We have all been there at one time or another. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Thanks CrazyChick, you sneaked in on me. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Eloise, this is very beautiful, yet so very sad. Well written! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
We never do want them to se us cry This is lovely Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
But inside we DO want them to see us cry - and to care - just hard to admit I think. Nicely done - I haven't forgotten you - I am e-mailing soon! K'...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Don't be afraid to let them see you cry just a little. Its a part of being human and they may learn from it. I think we've all been there, I have too often. James |
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Sonny Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 29Schenectady, NY, USA |
Eloise - Crying is nothing to be ashamed of - for women as well as for men. Your poem is simple and yet suggests complex emotions that are very moving. I have seen many women cry, and it was never anything that i regretted witnessing for it demonstrated trust in the relationship (romantic and friendly). It is no longer the stereotype of weakness, but more a signifier of trust and comfort. Nice work. Sonny |
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cokey_95 Junior Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 35 |
I love this poem..I think it describes what so many of us go thru.. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Eloise...this is so sad, but something very many of us can relate to....there is nothing so sad as unrequited love. Big Hugs to you... |
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