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The Perfect Moment
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The Perfect Moment |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
The perfect moment, when worries fall like lemon drops on your tongue; teasing, exhilerating; examining your toe and discovering those antibiotics are working; standing stuffed on the street, feet pounded sensitive from work, and feeling the satisfaction; thinking of your application to the writing paper under review; turning your insides into delicious agonies. Better than the communion of just-lovers, deeper than a meditation on death, and wider than your life are these half-cravings which play on your pores; the natural symphony. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"when worries fall like lemon drops on your tongue;" Love those lines! Well done! --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
thanx Kess..  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"The perfect moment, when worries fall like lemon drops on your tongue;" Man...what an opening  |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
always in awe of your work - man not only the first 4 lines - the whole lot!!! "these half cravings which play on your pores." Hey have you found out yet about the paper - when will you know?? You better tell me when you know!! |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
beautiful expressions, seaangel, I like this one. samsonheart |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Angela - if you don't get into the paper I will sit down and cry with you my friend (then we'll go and contest it!!!) Fantastic - again. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
SeaAngel, Wow, I love this especially the first 4 lines. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
WoW, fantastic job!! lemon drops mmmmm, ooops sorry hehe ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
It's great getting positive replies... Kess, thanx again Hoot, it came to me in a dream!! Nah, just kidding, I get flashes of lines I have to write down...does anyone else get that? Mirjam, awe is mutual, and no I haven't, still waiting on the word, tenterhooks, etc! samsonheart, thank you. Severn, don't raise that possibility!!!! DarkAngel, it came from the heart on the way home from work. Echo Rhayne, yeah citrus is my favourite fruit... "Stop this day and night with me and you shall possess the origin of all poems, You shall possess the good of the earth and sun (there are millions of suns left,) You shall no longer take things at second or third hand, nor look through the eyes of the dead, nor feed on the spectres in books, You shall not look through my eyes either, nor take things from me, You shall listen to all sides and filter them from your self." >Walt Whitman, Song of Myself. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Loved This Sea Angel Every line sublime Jenny Lee Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born. L. Pirandello 16th Century Dramatist |
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